FF: Smooth Burn...

[the_dark_zodiac]

Title: Smooth Burn...

Author: Twisted Darkness

Fandom: Criminal Minds

Pairing: Emily Prentiss / Jennifer 'JJ' Jareau [Jemily]

You: Jennifer 'JJ' Jareau

Setting: End Of Season 2.

Spoilers: Season 1 - 3.

Rating: M

Warning: Contains girl on girl action, if this offends please stop here.

Disclaimer: I own nothing. They belong

Comments

Holy Hell

[heart_never]

Thats has to be the hottest fic i've read in a very long time, its a masterpiece and i'm sure i'll be re-reading this many times in the weeks to come :D Thankyou so much for writing it, absolute brilliance :D

Re: Holy Hell

[the_dark_zodiac]

Thanks! Seriously thanks for reviewing.

tdz.

[lynders11]

Good freaking lord. That was...incredible. Well done you! I agree, I think its been awhile since I have read a fic quite that...stimulating. :D Is this a one-shot or are you thinking of continuing it to show their reactions to each other (and to Emilys inevitable difficulties walking) in the morning? Either way, this was fantastic. Well done. :)

[the_dark_zodiac]

Thank you. Not it's not a one shot. This is the first of my series of 'Smooth Burn', I have 3 other 'Smooth Burn' fics to write. There will be a follow up which deals with Emily's feelings. They were supposed to be in a double header but I thought I'd post this first.

tdz.

[steppenwolf_20]

Now this is definitely a story I will read again!
Insanely hot. But the sentence I liked most was almost at the beginning.
Maybe it is the mind that turns you on, the way her mouth fits around the languages that she uses.

I also really liked the images you used, JJ's feelings and how she wants to savor the moment, not knowing if this could last. How the drinks the whiskey, the feel of the glass at her back or the feel of the carpet under her feet. Great job.

There's just one thing I'm not sure about... when did the "toy" get into the story? Did I miss something?

Oh and I liked the POV you used. I know it's really hard to write that way.

[the_dark_zodiac]

Thank you!

Yeah, I think Emily has a really nice mouth ;D.

Yeah, I wanted to put everything into what JJ was feeling.

You come up behind her, she turns her head slightly, and the question dies on her lips. You press up against her, letting her feel what's there. Cliché, but you want your hands free as you fuck her. You won't be able to keep your hands off of her. This was where I refered to the 'toy', I guess it was little vague sorry!

Thank you, yeah I was unsure that I was getting it right.

Thank you everyone for reviewing!

tdz.

[steppenwolf_20]

*slaps hand to forehead* OMG, how stupid can a person ( as in I) be??

[the_dark_zodiac]

You weren't, not at all. I guess I was just a little vague. Who's your icon btw?

tdz.

Wow

[sstmyer]

That was just... wow! It oozed with sexiness. It was also incredibly well written. Can't wait for the other fics.

Re: Wow

[the_dark_zodiac]

Thank you. I hope I don't disappoint.

This is only my second published E/JJ fic, so everyone who's reviewing...thank you so much.

tdz.

[frenhu]

Sweetie, anytime I read this I'm amazed! Sorry it took so long for me to beta it!!

But now we need that second part and the chapter after that as well! And soon!! What do you say to that? :D

[the_dark_zodiac]

*hugs*

It's OK that you took so long, I'm just happy you could beta for me, you really helped improve this fic.

I promise that I will start writing the follow up, and I will publish Phantasm's first chapter. Now the Kink's over I can return to my writting [and I have forgotten I own you some Sassy ;D]

Thank you for reviewing.

tdz.