Part: Closed Doors and Open Windows (3/9)

[the5thmusketeer]

Title: PRELUDE TO A KISS
Author: The Fifth Musketeer
Email: TheFifthMusketeer@hotmail.com
Pairing: B/E, References to B/C
Rating: R (language, sexual references)
Fandom: Everwood
Disclaimer: No, they're not mine. Sue me - I dare you.
Notes: Continuation of the series. As with all in the series so far - un-betad, so forgive me in advance.
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[jadecaptain]

OoooOOOOOoooo shiny new story! *pets it* I really like the slow prgresion, it's a nice pace. Keeping you thinking.."oh, just a little bit more or a little farther..." Which is a very good change of pace I think.

I wai expectantly for the next chapter! Awesome job!

[danosulik]

Nine parts? Cool, another opus writer! (See my profile page.)

Minor quibble ... watch out for homonyms. Anyway.

He doesn't understand that when he opened himself up so completely to me, he took a piece of me away from Colin for himself.
Bright indeed.

I can't believe that even though he's been such a jerk about this whole thing, I still care.
That's our Ephram ... and we wouldn't have him any other way.

And Bright helping him hide ... yay!!!!

“I freaked out because of me - because of the way I felt. Not because of something you did.”
You're really getting Bright's voice down now. And Ephram's reaction is spot on. As is Colin's.

And you have a knack for suspense endings!

[the5thmusketeer]

Nine parts? Cool, another opus writer! (See my profile page.)

Ah ... a kindred spirit. I am nothing if no verbose.

As far as homonyms go, could you be specific? I don't want to have to scan the who thing again. The tragedy of not having a beta-reader :)

I've been worrying about Bright's voice, too. I'm much more a Colin or an Ephram when it comes to speech patterns -- glad I'm pulling it off.

Thanks again!

[danosulik]

As far as homonyms go, could you be specific?
I didn't see them on second reading, so maybe they were in another chapter. I'll let you know.

[the5thmusketeer]

It would be highly appreciated.

Thanks! :)

[anonymous]

oh yeah baby, i can't wait for more!
--Leann