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word_vomity December 21 2011, 17:15:55 UTC
Family Dynamics, Pt 1, PG-13

Another family function ruined, Lee think angrily as he stands rooted outside his mother's kitchen, listening to her drunkenly berate Kara for her unsanctioned relationship with his brother. Slurred words of dereliction of duty and irresponsibility reached his ears through the door. He expected to hear a response, Kara's incensed rebuttal raging through walls, shaking the house. He braced himself for the storm, but it didn't come. He barely caught her whispered response.

"I know."

That's not right, he thinks pushing into the room, distracting its occupants, preventing further damage. He beelines for the fridge, grabbing blindly for some excuse to be there ( ... )

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word_vomity December 21 2011, 17:16:23 UTC
Family Dynamics, Pt 2

He wonders whether she can feel his heart pounding, whether she can hear it. He knows that he needs to think right now, to figure this out, but she's so close to him. He's only body right now, his mind a hazy distant place he can't quite reach.

"What are you doing, Kara?" He mutters as she rolls onto her toes, bringing their faces within inches. She smells like a warm spring wind. Stop. Stop! STOP!

Her smile burns as she leans to close the distance between them. "Something we can't take back this time."

No! His brain screams just as she reaches his lips and he shoves her violently away. She stumbles momentarily before starting back towards him, determination gleaming in her eyes. But he just pushes her away again. "Stop it! I won't be your excuse ( ... )

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scifishipper December 21 2011, 20:01:59 UTC
Oh! Very tense! That is some pilot fight and I wasn't quite sure how it was going to turn out. Glad Kara was feeling able to face Carolanne again.

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word_vomity December 21 2011, 21:17:54 UTC
I'm glad too. Kara's not one to be driven away!

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wicked_sassy December 21 2011, 20:58:30 UTC
Ooh, good stuff. Kara's interaction with Carolanne definitely seems like it would be tense, and her interaction with Lee as her lover's brother is definitely... complicated. I liked this little beat:

"There's my girl." He smiles, rubbing his bicep.

"You frakking wish, Apollo." She snorts

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word_vomity December 21 2011, 21:17:23 UTC
Thank you. I like that little beat too. Bringing them back to status quo. :)

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embolalia December 23 2011, 21:57:41 UTC
Fascinating! I like how he takes up for Kara *to Kara* even when it means he doesn't get her, just because she needs it. That's our boy :)

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rdave1 December 27 2011, 14:23:31 UTC
WOW! Intense. Lee is really the only one that can stand up to Kara and live to talk about it. Sad that he fought her so she could be happy even if it wasn't with him. Great job!

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duchessduchie December 28 2011, 10:14:34 UTC
Great job with the emotions. Also, great job with bringing in the  line from the Eye of Jupiter episode and using it at the perfect time in the fic. I love how well you got across Kara's issues with allowing herself to be happy.    

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anamarya December 29 2011, 21:48:58 UTC
Having Kara saying to Lee what Sam did down on the algae planet is comforting and hurting in the same time- if that makes any sense.

I like that you made them speaking about it and I like that Kara decided to fight for Zak, even if that is not good for our pilots.

and this

"Stop it! I won't be your excuse."

"You already are." ... *heavy sigh*

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