Fic- Untitled, Jazz/Lockdown, Weekly Response Fic

[left_eye_better]

Title: Untitled - See author’s note
Writer: Left_eye_better
Rating: PG, for vaguely lewd comments
Characters: Jazz, and Lockdown
Prompt: Jazz/Lockdown- Catching a Shadow
Warning: See rating, besides that, Unbeta’d
Word Count: 869
Continuity: Animated with a reference to the G1 comics
Disclaimer: Transformers © Hasbro/Takara/Dreamworks/whoever.

Comments

[kamiraptor]

Ooo! Is this a one-shot or are you gonna write more to follow this??? Cuz that was really neat, and I'd love to see what happens between the two of them. :3

Anyway, as it stands, I love how Jazz is so serious - he definitely knows what he's getting into - and I get the vibe of "playful but deadly" from Lockdown and it is awesome. :D

Title? Well, for a one-shot, could be something boring like "Risk" or "Bet," and a longer fic (if I read the implications correctly) could be something silly like "The New Cyberninja Academy."

Am I awesome now?

Or, heck, you can just use the prompt as a title. That often works surprisingly well!

[left_eye_better]

Of course you are awesome.

I really do kinda of want to continue this but... There didn't seem to be a big interest in it unfortunately. I do hate to act as thought that matter, but it's not much of an encouragement.

If I continued it'd be a ride.

I see so many "Lockdown corrupts poor innocent Prowl" fics. I'd like to see one good "Someone tricks Lockdown back into his morals" fic and if any mech could it would be Jazz.

[anavidbookworm]

I rather enjoyed this story but it does leave me wanting more and I'm not sure why. I'm a little amazed that Jazz did not play the Prowl card to hook Lockdown. And now I'm wondering what Lockdown's role would be in the dojo or how many other former students are still around.

When it comes to a title all I can think of is Devil's Bargain or Last Resort.

[left_eye_better]

I'd be more interested in how the Prowl card would apply? I mean, yes Lockdown had an interest, but with Prowl dead I don't believe that interest would transfer. Unless I used the 'What Prowl achieved' as an enticement, though if Lockdown had be devoted to the ninja way enough to want to achieve that he wouldn't have turned on the dojo. Involving Prowl while might have been the expected route didn't seem to be the most effective. This wasn't about Prowl, and if I continued it, it wouldn't be about Prowl. This is about every other ninja but Prowl

[anavidbookworm]

I understand your logic behind leaving Prowl alone for this story; it makes sense. By the 'Prowl card' I was referring to how much respect Lockdown shows for Prowl during the series as compared to Yoketron. Where Lockdown tried and succeeded to kill Yoketron he continually tries to recruit Prowl as his partner. These actions would leave me to believe he had more respect for Prowl.

I do hope you consider continuing this, since you have obviously put a lot of thought into it so far. Also, I'm just really curious how Jazz would make this whole situation work.

[left_eye_better]

Well... persistence pay? Start of another Section has happened?

If I ever get to the point where I discuss the Lockdown and Yoketron situation in the fic, my thoughts on it will come out, but ... Even Prowl never finished his training under Yoketron. I see it as respect born out of similarity, that Lockdown had for Prowl. In his mind, perhaps, they were to similar mechs that never found a place in the universe, only by the time he came across Prowl, Prowl actually had.