I need help... please...

[nova_myth]

I don't know how many of you are aware of my fic Influence but I am in need of help.

And a lot of the characters are not co-operating, particularly Simmons.

What I'm stuck at is I need Simmons to show up after disappearing with more men and Banacheck and wants to interogate Fiona and the others but patricularly Mia who had help hide cade from Simmons

Comments

[artoni]

Angry, pissed off Simmons? How'd you know I had him living up here?

I haven't read your fic, but a brief scan shows a bit of shipping. So. Very possibly, Simmons makes a comment about Cade/one of the gals being close (put in much cruder terms) - something like a taboo on Cybertron or something? Or, hey, have him equate them to prostitutes, he's an asshole enough to do it and that's pretty much BAD in any culture.

That aside, who's Simmons most pissed off at? The girls, or the bots? Helps to know a target. :)

[nova_myth]

I edited the entry with more info since your questions were very good. I look forward to seeing what you have in mind dialog wise.

[artoni]

*Nods* Helps, a bit.

If I were writing Simmons here - mind you, I'm not, but just the way he's in my head - there'd definitely be something said along the lines of a human/robot relationship. Hell, he could even imply that /Cade's/ the whore, Mia just a friggin pervert, seeing as Cade's the one getting off easy. (Which would piss of my Cade muse to no end, but I digress

[nova_myth]

Yeah, Mia clearly states she accepts being Cade's but as property I won't say. And yeah, Simmons is very inventive on his rambles, which is why I'm having so much trouble.

I love the "Giving you a little extra maintenance on the side" comment and I might be able to build on that but as I said Simmons rambles and is very inventive as you pointed out so I'm still stuck a bit. But building up to the point where he implys her as a whore I'm supper stuck on.

I have the idea of him implying that because of her clubing lifestyle she likes to whore around, that's what going to ultimately set Cade off, but leading up to and wording it so it sounds Simmons is like trying to build code.