Oh Ellen, I really liked this. Justin as the little match boy, alone and huddled in the cold night, seeing his greatest wish and desire in that all too brief flame.
In the beginning, I thought it was a fantasy, but then you drew me in with the way you spun the tale, so tender and angsty at the same time. By the end, I was so caught up, that I was genuinely surprised when it wasn't real. Kudos on this and on the excellent construction! This was absolutely beautiful:
Everything else in the world is as lost to him as his own name, until he hears the whisper of the word as Brian breathes it out on an exhale of desire. "Justin."
I don't think I've ever read a gap filler of this scene, and now I never have to read another one. This was perfect.
Oh my dear, thank you so much for your wonderful feedback! I always appreciate reading what you have to say, and I'm really glad you liked this one. :)
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In the beginning, I thought it was a fantasy, but then you drew me in with the way you spun the tale, so tender and angsty at the same time. By the end, I was so caught up, that I was genuinely surprised when it wasn't real. Kudos on this and on the excellent construction! This was absolutely beautiful:
Everything else in the world is as lost to him as his own name, until he hears the whisper of the word as Brian breathes it out on an exhale of desire. "Justin."
I don't think I've ever read a gap filler of this scene, and now I never have to read another one. This was perfect.
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