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[fic] Center of the Universe [2786 KHR fanfic]

Oct 04, 2010 16:41

Title: Center of the Universe

Author: Primal Red a.k.a. teruame

Character/Pairing: Sawada Tsunayoshi. Miura Haru. Tsuna/Haru

Genre: Drama/Romance

Rating: PG-13 for some gory details and not-too-pleasant images as well as one reference to drugs, mostly from mafia life.

Prompt: I-43: TsuHaru-Lady-She was his pillar of endless hope.

Notes: None, really.

Word Count: ( Read more... )

miura haru, tsuharu, 2786 fanfic, tsuna, fanfiction, sawada tsunayoshi, haru

Comments 10

midnighthikari October 5 2010, 00:12:59 UTC

Hell yes. this was freaking perfect. Tsuna-fish's portrayl was exactly as how it would seem he'd grow up like. Haru definately seemed like TYL!Haru too (from what I think she'd be).

It's all absolutely perfect. Great job!

teruame October 5 2010, 00:26:27 UTC

Awwwww...thank you. :"> -is blushing from the praise- I was most worried about whether or not they sounded like themselves, and how they might have been like had they actually grown close in the midst of all that mafioso training. Though...I had originally intended this to be in their really late 18th-19th year to early 20s, but I guess I can't help but write TYL!TsuHaru. XDD

Thank you so much for reviewing. :D <3333333333333

aweofshe October 5 2010, 00:57:06 UTC

Oooh, loved it~ x3 Tsuna can confide in Haru. :D I think this is my favorite so far. ^^

Noticed one error near the end. "Funny how things turn out that ways." Should drop the s in ways.

teruame October 5 2010, 01:09:45 UTC

Yay! I'm so glad that you like this one. :3 -is honored- I think it might have to do with my tendency to improve over time...since UtES and AUR are kinda older? ^^; Iunno...

Thanks for that! ^^ *HUGS YOU* -goes to correct it-

aweofshe October 5 2010, 08:44:43 UTC

Nope, I didn't comment spam you enough today. :P Yeah, your writing has evolved quite a bit. Loving the whole universe/star theme in this piece, you explain it well (that sentence sounds kinda awkward but I think you know what i mean ><;). Btw, I read the Mukuro/Haru fic you have on ff.net. I never thought of that pairing before. o.O I'll try to drop you a review there when I'm not sleepy~

Hope you write more soon or update one of your older fics. ^^

teruame October 5 2010, 16:21:46 UTC

XDDD Awwwwww...I'm honored that you think that ways. :3

:) I guess its because I wanted an analogy that actually portrayed Haru correctly, and ended up thinking about stars and how the brighter ones aren't always the ones that shine the most in the sky (due to their distance, yep). Somehow, that made sense to me, so I used it. X3

:3 Thank you for reviewing. :D And, definitely! I will update and write more soon when I can.

seizansha October 6 2010, 03:18:27 UTC

i always thought Tsuna was alittle far-sighted when it came to Haru. he seems to really see her when she's not really close, so this analogy works wonders.

i'm glad that Haru's the one that Tsuna can really confide in. he needs someone that's got a vague idea, at least, of what's going on. and Kyouko's so damn ditzy! even though it's only touches on mob life, you got Tsuna and his reactions down well.

(this just makes me think of the whole honorifics situation. =D)

teruame October 6 2010, 04:04:35 UTC

:D Yay! The analogy works! XD ( ... )

seizansha October 6 2010, 18:06:09 UTC

but remember the Millefiore arc: boycott, Tsuna ends up spilling everything in the future. Kyouko's got the same blank face as always, but finally does something intelligent when they talk about Tsuna's box. when he tells Haru - who's known some of it all along - it really sinks in, she's crying on Bianchi's shoulder because of it all.(i love that scene because Tsuna's realizes he knows Haru's lying. if that isn't a hint...)

teruame October 6 2010, 23:11:56 UTC

Tsuna didn't reveal EVERYTHING, only everything he knew. And as far as I can see, that is kinda limited, because Tsuna doesn't realize the full scope of just how horrible the mafia really is yet in ways (even that time when he saw those scenes before his Version VR was a small surface compared to the full reality of all the mafia is about). Kyoko, from what I remember, interprets things in ways at literal face (recall that her brother said that Kyoko thinks boxing is men in boxers with mittens =A=) She could, from a similar standpoint, be very much misinformed about the mafia (she did say, "Wah! How cool!" when Reborn mentioned that he was part of the mafia, right? And then, when Tsuna went on motorcycles with Yamamoto and Gokudera, she reacted as usual =A=) and not understand that mafia = mass murder and mass executions and blood up to your knees and selling drugs around the world and major business in prostitution and human trafficking ( ... )