[Tsuna/Haru Fanfic] Three Stages of Being Lost, Part I

[teruame]

Title: Three Stages of Being Lost

Part Title: Searching (Part 1/3)

Author: Primal Red/teruame

Character(s): Sawada Tsunayoshi. Miura Haru. Tsuna/Haru

Genre: General/Romance

Rating: K+

Word count: 3,190

Warnings: Some Future Arc Spoilers if anyone hasn’t caught up.

Summary: Neither of them realized that both were lost in one way or another, and that they

Comments

[lilac_ayame]

That's a quite deep interpretation of what might change after they return to the present. But I kinda get the impression only Tsuna and Haru who are affected by the future. It was the same with your other fic. It might be because your focus is more on the two, but I just kinda feel it's rather unbalanced. Especially when Tsuna and Haru were rarely seen together.

It's good though :) I'll wait for the next part.

[teruame]

Actually, that's a good point. I tend to focus too much on the characters that center most in the story, so...it gets to be rather unbalanced in that sense. :-/ As usual, I guess I'll have to see how I can make the different changes in each character sometime in a later fanfic.

[tharrow]

Lovely work! I think that both Haru and Tsuna were in character but I do agree with Lilac Ayame's observations.

[teruame]

Aye. So far, I think it might be because I tend to focus too much on the most important characters, and that tends to make it difficult to balance. ^^; It's a fault of mine, and I hope that I can change it over time.