erm... hi... just finally got around to reading the 2nd chapter, and it is of course <3. Generally I think 2nd person is more appropriate for a one-shot, and anything longer than that drives me crazy, but it's ok here since you kept the chapters short and interesting. This is such a limited POV that a lot of background info is missing, which means that the style is very personal yet sort of mysterious and aloof. (or maybe that's just me not really remembering what happened in ch 1, lol.) My only real issue here is that you use the word "you" very frequently, in close succession, but I don't know how to really fix that, since it's the only pronoun that's truly relevant in a 2nd-person POV story...
yeah... so... long convoluted way of saying that I haven't talked to you in forever and I miss you and you'd better not be dead.
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yeah... so... long convoluted way of saying that I haven't talked to you in forever and I miss you and you'd better not be dead.
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I miss lemming too =o
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