You should have told me you added me! ~_^ I would have added you back sooner!
Anyway's that was very well writen, and I enjoyed it! I did notice a few mistakes, like forgetting to add an 'a' in some parts, which would make it flow more smoothly. But other then that, I loved it! 10 year old Zack would have been such a terror! XD
Few mistakes? =\ I'll try rereading it, but I dun think I'll catch them this time either T_T
10-year old Zack? *shivers* I'm surprised the world hadn't imploded earlier =333 (though the Zack in this chapter may be mellow ... I wonder what'd happen when he discovers coffee? =DDD)
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Anyway's that was very well writen, and I enjoyed it! I did notice a few mistakes, like forgetting to add an 'a' in some parts, which would make it flow more smoothly. But other then that, I loved it! 10 year old Zack would have been such a terror! XD
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Few mistakes? =\ I'll try rereading it, but I dun think I'll catch them this time either T_T
10-year old Zack? *shivers* I'm surprised the world hadn't imploded earlier =333 (though the Zack in this chapter may be mellow ... I wonder what'd happen when he discovers coffee? =DDD)
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Coffee and hyperactive children do NOT mix!
I would feel so bad for his parents! XD
And when he is older, I would feel sorry for Cloud!
The mistake I was talking about was when they were talking about the staff on the rock.... you just needed to ad an 'a' before the rock... I think >_>
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and a belated thanks for reading >33 *double glompage*
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