LotS FIC: This Is How You Break

[tempest819]

Title: This Is How You Break
Author: Tempest
Fandom: Legend of the Seeker
Pairing: Cara/Dahlia
Word Count: 6,162
Rating: R
Disclaimer: I don’t own them, but if I did, this is how it would go down.
Disclaimer 2: Again, I haven’t read any of the Sword of Truth series, strictly a LotS watcher, so of course I am taking liberties. 
Summary: Cara’s drifts in

Comments

[sofiemae]

Wow! Very evocative. I like how you broke every section of their life together with Cara's breaking. It really gave this a focus and the end although short is perfect.

[tempest819]

Thank you! I tried a little some thing different this time than my usual straight forward narrative. Happy to see it didn't go too haywire.

[tempest819]

I'm sorry, did you say something? I was a little distracted by your icon! ;-)

Thanks for always dropping in! It's a bit of of a potpourri of emotions, but I'm glad I 'sold' you on it in the end. :-)

[mayireadtoday]

"She wouldn’t have to do this if she wore pants like the boys, they had pockets." -- The annoyance of my adult life is that woman's pants don't have pockets.

Oh Dahlia: “Then take what is already yours.”

So beautiful: “I hate that he touched you first.”
[...]
“He only touched my flesh. You were inside me first.”

Very interesting: "it was part of their duty to please their superiors when it was requested of them."

This was wonderful.

[tempest819]

Thank for picking out your favorite parts. I'm always curious to see what sticks with the reader...which is usually the exact opposite of what I predict! Lol!

[puffy_wuffy]

Wow. I really loved the flow of this piece.

[tempest819]

Many thanks! I was testing the waters with this style, so I'm glad to see that it flowed.

[tempest819]

So happy that you liked it!!!! I was a bit trepidacious about posting it, because it's not what I'm used to and I wasn't completely confident in it. Your comments make me happy I did!