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tellshannon815

Better Man

Jun 04, 2009 21:15

Title: Better Man
Characters: Hurley, Libby, Frogurt, Kate.
Pairing: Hurley/Libby.
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: AU. Spoilers for the mobisode "The Adventures of Hurley and Frogurt."
Summary: Written for the fix-it challenge over at lostsquee. Hurley remembers the blankets and gets to have his picnic with Libby.

( Hurley always screwed up with dates )

lost: neil frogurt, lost: hurley reyes, lost: libby smith, lost: kate austen

Comments 16

senderofeight June 4 2009, 21:36:49 UTC

This is exactly how it should have happened on the show.

I really like this, you really captured the sincerity of their (unfortunately short-lived) relationship, Hurley's awkwardness is true to character, and I like how you portrayed Libby, especially in that moment when Hurley is trying to remember where he knows her from. Sweet. :) Very well done.

gealbhan_beag June 5 2009, 00:59:43 UTC

I agree -- exactly! I think you're spot on with your characterization, and I have a serious soft spot for Hurley/Libby (which I can never seem to find enough of). Yay!!! It made my night!

tellshannon815 June 5 2009, 21:01:49 UTC

I know, it totally sucks that they killed her off, maybe people haven't been writing Hurley/Libby so much because there's been no Libby on screen to provide inspiration? Either way, it's crap that there's so little out there.

Glad you liked this, I have other Libby fics including backstory if you'd like to see more of her!

tellshannon815 June 5 2009, 21:16:45 UTC

I wish it had been this way, Hurley deserves some happiness!

Thanks for reading, I'm glad you liked this!

xgreen_bananax June 5 2009, 02:01:03 UTC

I'm so glad you wrote Hurley/Libby! I love them together, and her death is something I would like to fix, too. The characterization of both of them, especially Hurley, was just great. The line about remembering the blankets was so heartbreakingly ironic...gah. Beautifully done!

tellshannon815 June 5 2009, 21:14:26 UTC

Thanks for this, glad you enjoyed this one! If you ever did want to fix it, maybe even for this challenge, I'd be interested to read it.

violettehasagun June 5 2009, 08:41:13 UTC

Oh, this breaks my heart. The way they got rid of Libby still makes me angry. You have Hurley down perfectly - his awkwardness, his insecurity, his goodness and his slightly hopeless sense of chivalry. Lovely.

tellshannon815 June 5 2009, 21:07:31 UTC

I can't bear character deaths anyway (as most people who know me probably know) but this was one of the ones I've been most pissed off about - she had so much potential and was killed way too soon!

Good to hear you think I've got Hurley right - he's one I enjoy writing, so I'm pleased to have done him justice!

valhalla37 June 5 2009, 13:40:47 UTC

Ooooh, I adore your Hurley ... what a sweetheart, and so IC! This was so lovely -- the Neil moments made me giggle, and the connection between Libby and Hurley was so touching (also loved the mental hospital mention). If only, eh?

tellshannon815 June 5 2009, 21:11:26 UTC

Neil - he was such an ass, wasn't he? I really don't know why he ever thought Libby would be interested in him.

I still think the reason Libby was in Santa Rosa was to do with events of my last fic about her, and yes, if only indeed!

aurilly June 10 2009, 15:30:34 UTC

This was really darling! I've never read a fic from Hurley's POV before but this was just perfect! And Libby's voice was spot-on, too, with her kind and patient shrink mannerisms, and the way she genuinely liked Hurley. I'd forgotten what a great pairing they were. That scene with Sayid giving Hurley advice on how to have a romantic date on the island is one of my favorites so I'm thrilled that you took a story off that point. This was a great read. Thanks for sharing. :)

tellshannon815 June 10 2009, 21:59:39 UTC

Thank you! I miss these two together, if only Sayid really had reminded Hurley about the blankets!