JOY. Cloud and Rufus as brothers fic! (Or at least, implied - I suppose you could always deliver a cool twist and reveal they were never brothers and it was simply coincidence). I am EXCITED
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Thank you very much. Zack actually was actually the easiest character to write in this chapter even more than Rufus (who as you know I've written before). He's a lot like a girl I had drama class with, energetic but not stupid. He may jump to conclusions but when they're the important ones, he tends to get it write. I had a lot harder time pinning down Tifa as I tend to write male characters.
A fair bit of Zangan came from your assumption that he was from Wutai so I have to thank you for that.
I think Tifa is a hard character to pin down, full stop. I've also been trying to write her recently and she gives me no end of trouble, but I think you've done an excellent job - especially of Tifa pre-Nibelheim, of which there is even less canon material to draw from.
Well, he has an oriental-sounding name whereas most of the main continent characters have distinctly English or Norse names, and he taught martial arts, which in this verse are largely associated with Wutai (what with ninja Yuffie), and he didn't seem all that hot on ShinRa when you spoke to him before the fire... there COULD be other explanations but Occam's razor, right? I like it, anyway, so that hint of backstory and insight into his thoughts gave me pleasure. It feels like you've plugged a hole in a canon.
I don't read fanfic, like ever. So uh, I don't know what to write as feedback. But some of these parts really tugged on my heartstrings... T___T Like, a lot. Bahhhh, my Tifa.
And um, I found a lot of little grammatical/whatever errors, but I don't know if you want people pointing that out.
Hey, any feedback is better than no feedback. I'm honoured that you chose my story to start and I've got a rec page if you want to know where you can find pretty good fic.
Great. I've traumatized a person. It really makes my day. :P
No, I don't mind at all if you point them out. Constructive criticism is the gold of reviews. All things considered, I'm a rather dubious proofreader when it comes to my own work, though I imagine a few of them I may have done for stylistic purposes.
You know how there are some stories out there that leave an indelible mark, the kind where even if it's been years and you can't remember the rest of it, one little thing will stick in your mind? Yup. Just found one: "[Zangan] couldn’t shake the feeling that this destiny wasn’t his." Going to put this into my list of stories that must be tracked zealously, if you don't mind being stalked. :)
Nah, not trying to apply pressure, so please breathe easy! *laughs*
It's just that destiny and chance have been key words in the turnings of my life, and this one phrase absolutely caught my imagination, so it is what it is: me, hooked!
You're definitely too nice. Especially considering my initial inspiration for that fic was that I noticed the dearth of Vincent adopts Sephiroth AUs. Zack was more or less a substitute for my crazier thoughts on the subject.
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A fair bit of Zangan came from your assumption that he was from Wutai so I have to thank you for that.
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Well, he has an oriental-sounding name whereas most of the main continent characters have distinctly English or Norse names, and he taught martial arts, which in this verse are largely associated with Wutai (what with ninja Yuffie), and he didn't seem all that hot on ShinRa when you spoke to him before the fire... there COULD be other explanations but Occam's razor, right? I like it, anyway, so that hint of backstory and insight into his thoughts gave me pleasure. It feels like you've plugged a hole in a canon.
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I'll take that compliment. ^_^
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I don't read fanfic, like ever. So uh, I don't know what to write as feedback.
But some of these parts really tugged on my heartstrings... T___T Like, a lot. Bahhhh, my Tifa.
And um, I found a lot of little grammatical/whatever errors, but I don't know if you want people pointing that out.
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Great. I've traumatized a person. It really makes my day. :P
No, I don't mind at all if you point them out. Constructive criticism is the gold of reviews. All things considered, I'm a rather dubious proofreader when it comes to my own work, though I imagine a few of them I may have done for stylistic purposes.
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*is totally not feeling pressured*
As for stalking, well it's pretty much the main hobby of the internet. So far be it from me to interfere with society's dysfunctional pass-times.
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It's just that destiny and chance have been key words in the turnings of my life, and this one phrase absolutely caught my imagination, so it is what it is: me, hooked!
Besides, the Intermission you wrote for ( ... )
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You're definitely too nice. Especially considering my initial inspiration for that fic was that I noticed the dearth of Vincent adopts Sephiroth AUs. Zack was more or less a substitute for my crazier thoughts on the subject.
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No, Tifa. D:
I like your interpretation of Tifa, personally.
(And Sephiroth too :o so cold and larger than life)
And Zack is so in-character. You do get him.
well that sure escalated quickly
Also, Rufus being a proper silver tongued master manipulator, nice. :D
the countdown was as ominous as that cliffhanger :O what will happen now?!
onwards to the next chapter now
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"Zack had been bemused to notice she had switched that cute cowgirl outfit"
Should be "amused", instead of "bemused".
This appears to be a super common mistake, so don't worry.
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