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the gasp and stutter of a heart 10/11

Apr 20, 2012 08:23

Title: the gasp and stutter of a heart 10/11
Author: dave7
Rating: M
Characters/Pairings: Richard Castle/Kate Beckett
Fandom: Castle
Spoilers: Season Three.
Notes: I know, I'm sorry. But it insisted there be another chapter. I'll fix formatting issues after work today, promise.

Summary: He scrubbed until he was raw, but the blood wouldn’t shift, ( Read more... )

richard castle, castle, kate beckett, fic: stutter of a heart, fic, castle/beckett

Comments 11

lady_alena April 19 2012, 22:52:54 UTC

That sound you just heard was my heart hitting the floor at your feet.

The way you weave this alternate reality in with the show timeline is fantastic, and I love the way you word things. I really like the story being from Castle's point of view because you capture him so well. Seriously, his anguish is palpable.

I so look forward to every update of this story, and I am incredibly saddened that we are so near to the end now. I sincerely hope though that there is at least something of a happy ending to be had, because I can't stand even the thought of these two not earning that together. I can't wait for the last chapter, thank you so much for sharing this!!

dave7 April 22 2012, 06:02:10 UTC

You're very welcome, thank you very much for sharing your thoughts.

I'm more comfortable inside Castle's head, and so I'm really glad you like the portrayal.

The last update should be up in a little while. I can't promise happy, but certainly hopeful. :)

xdawnfirex April 20 2012, 02:35:32 UTC

WOW. Next chapter SOON, please!!!!!

dave7 April 22 2012, 06:02:34 UTC

Soon, I promise. :)

thefallingapple April 20 2012, 04:05:15 UTC

Wow! This is intense and very well written. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter to find out how everything is resolved. You've done such a nice job reimagining season three. Thank you for sharing this.

dave7 April 22 2012, 06:03:08 UTC

You're welcome, thank you for sharing your thoughts. :)

The last chapter should be up soon. I hope it doesn't disappoint.

tashadan April 20 2012, 19:22:00 UTC

hiccupping silence --- these two words alone tell a story. A long, heartbreaking, been-there-done-that-oh-my-goodness type of story. Pulitzer-prize worthy.

Rick was too slow - too slow with a ring, too slow in front of a bullet --- Poor, poor, Castle. One definitive example of "what if?"

I still love this. I've loved it from the start, and I love the fact that it's not over yet. Yay for 11.

Aaaaaaand - will we get to see your take on season 4, too????

dave7 April 22 2012, 06:04:01 UTC

You're making me blush, Tash.

Thank you very much for your kind words.

As for season four... erm... No comment.

lizparker6 May 2 2012, 23:23:37 UTC

that what you hear there, is me, pouting very, VERY loudly. I will let you know my final decision once AFTER ive read the last chapter.

You wont get any sugar from me, no no...you wont...

ps - just one logistical thing, it was a bit confusing to me at the end of the chapter, at first, rick told the doc to save them both, she answered it was not the best option, but she didnt say it was impossible. so i thought by rick saying - do it - he meant they shall try anyway, then the next scene, he describes sighning their sons life away, which indicated he chose kate..just that..for me personally, it was a bit confussing. also, i cannot even imagine to make a choice like that. but if you asked me, i would have chosen kate too. also, the way you wrote castle blaming himself was heartbreaking.

dave7 May 3 2012, 20:13:09 UTC

Ah. "Do it," was him agreeing to the surgery separate them. The chances the baby would survive at that age are terribly slim, so by signing the consent for the procedure he was, in his own mind, signing away his son's life. It wasn't meant to be a literal thing.

Perhaps I should think of a way to clarify that more in the story...

And again, thank you for sharing your thoughts. :)

lizparker6 May 3 2012, 20:45:51 UTC

Oh, dont worry, I might appear that thick most of the time, but I got that literal thing on signing away baby castles life, lol. just that he asked first for saving them both and then said 'do it' that confused me, but only while directly reading.

Also, castle didnt really have a choice there, poor boy, did he? Either their chances to be slim, or even slimmer.

Anyway, just remembered that i loved also how kate send him to check on the baby and how he felt bad for not being able to do it himself before cause he was staying with her..so heartbreaking! *shakes a pointy finger at you in warning*