Completely narcissistic writing meme

[tasyfa]

Stolen from synecdochic:
Quote a bit of my fic at me? Find that one story of mine that you really like, and find a sentence or a paragraph that presses your prose-buttons in the right way, and comment here with it? Don't care how long or short.I believe the question marks are substituting for the old-fashioned, "please." ;) I was thinking that this might help

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[oh_johnny_]

I am so stealing this meme :-)

I was on my way to find something from Downtown Whore when I got sidetracked by this:

After 16 years of friendship with Tré Cool, Billie had gotten used to the fact that it was impossible to know what to expect from him at any given moment. But even that wasn't enough to prepare him for the sight that met his eyes as he fully entered the warm copy room: Tré, shirtless, shoeless and beltless, with a nearly two-foot-long chain of paper clips connecting his ear and his nipple, shaking his chest and hips and gyrating like a deranged Chiquita Banana lady on serious steroids.

It is undoubtedly the most purely visual image that I think you've ever written, at least in the non-porn division. The rest of the fic is fun, but this bit has stayed with me as the essence of The Cool.

So, then Downtown Whore. And it's just one line:

"Isn't that a pretty, pretty sight?"It still makes me shiver. Such a perfect introduction to the whole fic. I can hear it being drawled appreciatively, dom to boy, setting up the

[tasyfa]

Hee! I'm glad you *did* continue on to Downtown Whore then, because I totally agree that that Mark(er) para is ultimate Cool - and leighrowena wrote it. :D Merci for playing. ♥

[oh_johnny_]

Well, fuck.

*facepalms*

Um...yeah...glad I continued on, too :-)

[tasyfa]

*grins* No, that's good - means it was seamless. And I *did* tell her, hey, this is what Tré's gonna be up to when Billie walks in, but she constructed that particular beauty. It's one of my favourites, too.

[nightsofcydonia]

I know this is a massive quote (and I think I've quoted this at you before), but all of this from Downtown Whore pushes my buttons:

"Yes," he whispered, not fully understanding this impulse in himself but no longer questioning it. No longer capable of questioning anything, not when every inch of him ached in such powerful, impossible arousal.

I love how Billie goes from defiant to desperate during the course of this fic; you get a real sense of him giving himself over to Rob.

The verbal acquiescence came as a pleasurable surprise to Rob, desire spurting through him despite his recent orgasm. He truly hadn't expected Billie to surrender so completely. He had known from the instant he'd first slapped him, finger marks showing beautifully red on the curved white flesh, how he wanted to finish this, but didn't think he would be able to convince the small, pretty punk rocker to let him. It thrilled him to have been proven wrong.What makes this fic imo (and all of your fics I've read, actually) is the constant view into both the

[nightsofcydonia]

OH FUCK IT IS MASSIVE. :/

[tasyfa]

*giggles* Yeah, 'tis massive, but I'm all right with that. :D That might possibly be my favourite comeshot that I've written. Lord knows that part was done long before I actually got that far in the story! And I'm incapable of not including care/aftercare or making it as real/human as possible, so that was cool. Thanks much for the commentary - I do appreciate it. :)

*peeks in*

[bivouack]

The beginning of A Betting Man:

A quiet click sounded as the bolt slid home, and Billie sagged against the hotel door in relief. Finally the day was over and he could get some sleep.

Fate, however, had other plans. Before he could turn around to fully enter the room, hands pressed flat against his shoulder blades, pinning him to the door. Billie Joe froze for a moment, panic swelling blackly until warm breath gusted past his ear in a voice he knew.

“So. New tour.”

A quicksilver smile crossed his face. “You didn’t waste any time, Mike.”

Also from A Betting Man:

“Fucking stay there, bitch.”

The timing is perfect. That line always hits me so hard. Christ, that entire story just hits me so hard.

As well (and I'm sorta breaking the rules here), but the entirety of Vernal Equinox. I'm always left at a complete loss for words whenever I read it - it’s so, so very beautiful

Re: *peeks in*

[tasyfa]

I'm actually really glad you pulled out the 'bitch' line, because I dithered over that one for quite a while - whether it fit, if it seemed OOC or not, and finally left it in because I liked the impact.

VE was an experience to write. Thanks for the comments!