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ellorgast in tasting_stars

In the City of Crystal: Chapter 1

Nov 15, 2009 17:34

Because it was never officially posted anywhere, and because I am now finally getting close to continuing it, here is Chapter 1 of In the City of Crystal. This was originally conceived for Ficathon 2007, and it came to me in a rush as I was driving to work one day (and seeing as how I was working 5:30 a.m. shifts at the time, I was probably ( Read more... )

angstmobile, jadeite, city of crystal, ami

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venusorbit1 November 16 2009, 09:59:37 UTC

I need to read this a few more times before I comment bomb you, but for now:

You know that imaginary grand you dropped on me?

*raises eyebrows*

*pushes pile of money across table*

Although I imagine you gave me American currency so that's like, what, four bucks in Canadian?

ellorgast November 16 2009, 18:23:29 UTC

*dies laughing* I should have known that you would use that money for dark purposes.

I am SO GLAD that you liked it! I'm terribly excited to continue it, even though my writing of chapters is a bit slow going.

Woooooo I can buy me some coffee and a danish with this here thousand bucks! All the better to write with!

venusorbit1 November 20 2009, 05:32:08 UTC

Here's another grand. WRITE THE THIRD CHAPTER.

charliechaplin2 November 19 2009, 13:16:20 UTC

OH MY GOD YOU MEAN YOU'VE WRITTEN ANOTHER CHAPTER FOR THIS?! OH MY GOD!! WHAT AM I DOING WRITING THIS!?!?! I NEED TO GET READING!!!! NOW!!!!!!

charliechaplin2 November 19 2009, 13:22:39 UTC

Sorry, had to read this first to re-familiarise myself with it. Did I tell you how much I loved it first time round? I love that you pair Ami and Jadeite, I adore that Ami was flirting with Haruka, and best of all, I think it's fnatastic that you've allowed Ami's character to grow and become more forward in this world.

The description of the city they live in was just so easy to picture, I'm so gla dyou're finally coninuing this!!!

ellorgast November 19 2009, 23:12:03 UTC

No worries, it has been like three years! I would be surprised if you didn't have to reread this chapter! I believe you did tell me you liked it the first time, and that's why I figured you'd appreciate seeing it continued.

Eee, thank you! I've realized through this that I really love Ami and Jadeite together. They compliment each other so well. I'm aiming for lots of non-couple interaction with the other characters too.

lovelylytton January 29 2010, 21:41:08 UTC

uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuh, intrigue!
I have no idea what is going on in this fic other than Rei making a cameo appearance at the end. Joji seems to be Jadeite, his exuberance certainly points to it. Amaya could be the reborn Mercury, more because of the hair than because of the name (you threw me with Emi) here and now my mind is working overtime on who the emperor could possibly be. I'm thinking Demando because that would be the most obvious choice, but since I like my fic to be dark, I may venture a completely random guess: Endymion himself.
Also, FOOTNOTES! I love footnotes! Seriously, I do.
Can you tell that your story has captured me? I'm a bit in love with the completely natural dialogue you wrote, you get an army of gold stars for that.

lovelylytton January 29 2010, 21:43:35 UTC

Completely forgot to mention that this line-> "Fairy tales!" She once cried in exasperation, throwing down her scribbled notes on the table and making a beeline for the cheap whiskey in the kitchen. "I'm trying to discuss political revolution, and he gives me fairy tales!"
-> deserves an award.