This ... was ... AWESOME!! Sherlock and Asimov's Laws of Robotics... two of my favourite things :)
I can see how one of the laws wouldn't be to obey a human's orders; can you imagine Sherlock doing what someone tells him to? Does NOT fit in his personality.
30K ARE YOU INSANEGosh, Tartan, the worldbuilding you've done in this. The first few paragraphs were, strangely, enough to establish the whole atmosphere of the fic, which on the whole ties in with that of the show very well - there's something metallic and concise to your descriptions that fits Sherlock and Sherlock's ... thought structure, I suppose, very well. It was very intriguingly done, that: the way you developped on Sherlock's reactions and thoughts, his physical, outward expressions, his words from ASiP, and gave them entirely new meanings, the way you spun the well-known plot into something just different enough to be both recognizable and interestingly novel at the same time. It's a very delicate, very thin balance, that not many fic writers manage to reach when they rewrite the series in AU setting, and you've mastered it perfectly in this
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IT WAS 22K AND THEN I HAD TO EDIT IT AND ADD A LOT OF WORLDBUILDING AND AND AND.
I will tell you a not-very-secret secret: the very first scene was one of the last I wrote. Oh man I can't believe I spent 29k retelling ASiP. THIS IS WHAT HAPPENS WHEN YOU YOU DON'T OUTLINE FICS. I AM A CAUTIONARY TALE.
Ever since I started working on this I've been reading other people's fic and noticing that most people write Sherlock POV with a lot of the same phrasing I use to write robot Sherlock POV. There is just not that much difference. Which makes a Sherlock-is-a-robot AU kind of inevitable, really. But it is a bit scary.
Wow. This was thoroughly, utterly wonderful. You have done such an amazing job writing Sherlock's perspective, and creating this realistic world, and I love the way you balance John's perspective in such a way that intellectually he is entirely clear on Sherlock's limitations but his empathy keeps pulling him in the potentially painful direction of emotional attachment. Until I got to the end of the fic and read the prompt in the Author's Notes, I really didn't know if you were going to give Sherlock the capacity to grow into emotion. That will be fascinating to watch. I loved the careful way you rearranged the casefic in this to make it fresh and perfectly fitted to the world. And in general your writing style is elegant and your characterizations spot-on. I love that you are taking the time to build the background we need to really invest in this and see gradual change. Thank you so much for all the work you put into this, it is a really amazing story. Bravo
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:D Thanks for articulating John's perspective for me. That's going to be a major theme in the sequel, but I hadn't really thought to phrase it quite like that. Oh man, building the background. That was, um, kind of an accident? I didn't plan this fic or its structure at all, it just came out and then I had to edit it A LOT. Whoops.
You're not missing anything obvious in the end; that question goes unanswered. Hope could have just told him the name in this 'verse, couldn't he? :D
That was really intriguing. Not something that I would have thought I could buy into based upon the summary, but your humanization of Sherlock worked really well. You've definitely laid the ground work for something crazy awesome with John and Sherlock that's left me pondering them still a day after reading. Thank you for sharing. I look forward to reading a continuation of their story some day.
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I can see how one of the laws wouldn't be to obey a human's orders; can you imagine Sherlock doing what someone tells him to? Does NOT fit in his personality.
Looking forward eagerly to the sequels.
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And yes, I looked at the second law and was like, well, NOPE. Haha.
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30K ARE YOU INSANEGosh, Tartan, the worldbuilding you've done in this. The first few paragraphs were, strangely, enough to establish the whole atmosphere of the fic, which on the whole ties in with that of the show very well - there's something metallic and concise to your descriptions that fits Sherlock and Sherlock's ... thought structure, I suppose, very well. It was very intriguingly done, that: the way you developped on Sherlock's reactions and thoughts, his physical, outward expressions, his words from ASiP, and gave them entirely new meanings, the way you spun the well-known plot into something just different enough to be both recognizable and interestingly novel at the same time. It's a very delicate, very thin balance, that not many fic writers manage to reach when they rewrite the series in AU setting, and you've mastered it perfectly in this ( ... )
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I will tell you a not-very-secret secret: the very first scene was one of the last I wrote. Oh man I can't believe I spent 29k retelling ASiP. THIS IS WHAT HAPPENS WHEN YOU YOU DON'T OUTLINE FICS. I AM A CAUTIONARY TALE.
Ever since I started working on this I've been reading other people's fic and noticing that most people write Sherlock POV with a lot of the same phrasing I use to write robot Sherlock POV. There is just not that much difference. Which makes a Sherlock-is-a-robot AU kind of inevitable, really. But it is a bit scary.
:D :D :D THANK YOU.
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You're not missing anything obvious in the end; that question goes unanswered. Hope could have just told him the name in this 'verse, couldn't he? :D
Thanks for reading and commenting!
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