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jlm121 September 13 2009, 17:05:31 UTC
This was just absolutely incredible. Great dialog and characterizations.

I have been very impressed with your Pike/Number One fic but I think this is my favorite

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taraljc September 13 2009, 20:36:21 UTC
Thanks so much! I really enjoy playing with theri dynamic, and figureing out how they work as people as well as together.

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taraljc September 13 2009, 23:49:36 UTC
yays!

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syredronning September 14 2009, 00:02:01 UTC
Lovely, lovely story - beautiful development, great inclusion of the episode, wonderful dinner-ending-with-open-talking and hot sex. Yum.

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taraljc September 14 2009, 18:25:26 UTC
So glad you enjoyed it!

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rhipowered September 14 2009, 15:21:13 UTC
This fits so perfectly into the Glory storyline and where that novel ends. Loved it.

Though now I totally want fic just about Cait Barry (no offense to Number One, mind).

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taraljc September 14 2009, 15:23:14 UTC
Thanks so much!

Cait is awesome. I know slwatson took the Cait prompt at treknovelfest, so there will be mroe cait out thre eventually...

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cmdr_zoom September 14 2009, 18:56:34 UTC
By this point, I know I'm going to love anything you write. This is no exception. You're just as good with the TOS material as the new.

I admit I'm partial to Colt, myself - Laurel Goodwin was just cute as a button - but not as a match for the Captain; Number One fits him much better, as I'm sure you'd agree. But I was glad you had Cait note it must have been embarrassing for her too, and hard for her to fill Cusack's boots. And I imagine that some of Number One's sharpness was because Colt was bold enough to express what she herself couldn't (without help; in vino veritas).

After a very hot consummation scene, the last paragraph made me smile, and wonder how much truth there might be to it... and also reminded me again of the comedies, and the custom of pairing everyone up at the end. Nicely done.

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taraljc September 14 2009, 20:54:27 UTC
I toyed with the diea that both Boyce and Barry do like someone whsoe good with their hands, but I think I like it better with just their scheming backfireing on them that wee tiny bit. tho I could see someday down the line a friends-with-benefits sort of arrangement.

It was really important to me that the friction between Colt and Number One not just be jealousy over a man. Because, just no, you know? And I think someone like Number One would be affected by having her feelings for Pike trotted out in front of the brand new subbordinate. Becasue it's sin't so much I think that she's jealous of Colt, as she's convinced herself that Colt and Janese and Vina attract Pike in a way she doesn't--because she can't change who she is, and she doesn't want to. But I actually think their resulting relqationship is so much stronger precisely because it isn't about just that first flush of physical attraction. It's about who they are as people. And it's who she is that makes Pike desire her, not whether she fills out a sweater the same way as ( ... )

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cmdr_zoom September 14 2009, 21:40:02 UTC
Interesting. Was that on one of the DVDs?

I agree on the friction and jealousy. Colt's question was inappropriate, and a breach of protocol... but it also just happens to be (more or less) what Number One, on her own, has been trying to work up the nerve to say for months, and telling herself why she can't. More a catalyst than a rival.

Heh. And now I'm thinking of another fresh-faced farm kid - throws himself into things, wears his heart on his sleeve, gets himself in trouble a lot...

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taraljc September 14 2009, 21:46:06 UTC
I found it on a site I forgot to bookmark, from soemoen who worked on the remastered ep, and it's mentioned here. I can't find my copy of The Making of Star Trek to actually dig up the lines from the shooting script.

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