I think the problem with this poem is that I can see what you're trying to do in it--and I feel as if I'm just floating on the surface of the poem when it starts to turn into the poem you're trying to write.
I think you should start in the poem with the story of the polar bears and the ice caps--and cut the first two stanzas unless you want the heavy heat of the summer to bridge the thoughts of global warming with the you in the poem that is elsewhere--in which case i suggest you move that transition to the center of your poem.
And i would cute the last two stanzas completely and never look back.
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I think you should start in the poem with the story of the polar bears and the ice caps--and cut the first two stanzas unless you want the heavy heat of the summer to bridge the thoughts of global warming with the you in the poem that is elsewhere--in which case i suggest you move that transition to the center of your poem.
And i would cute the last two stanzas completely and never look back.
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