I don't have a very immotion icon....so this will have to do.
Loved the first one, it's so Ryan *g*
*randomly bursts into tears* Kyle, no *huggles* It's not fair.
Well written, I just saw one tiny thing, if you don't mind me saying: 'But there again, blood was slick before it dried.' Should probably be But then again...'
Other than that, well done, very emotional, and Kyle just loves Ryan and...and...*cries again*
10_random is freaking awesome. I know I should finish the two prompt tables I already have but I needed something extra to occupy my mind besides TC, TC. And I wanted a little more Twin!Lurve going on. xD
I could never see young!Ryan just loving to dance. It'd mess with sense of order, ya know. Sure I can see him going to a bar or club, maybe, with a friend or something to have a few drinks but after awhile I'd think he'd get a little uncomfortable with the chaos. Now - Older!Ryan - I'm pretty sure he's got firm control of his OCD tendencies and everything but being out on a crowded dance floor after awhile, among all those sweaty bodies. . .not so sure he could stick it out for long periods. Small does, ya know.
*smacks self* Yeah, this is what I get for writing so freaking early in the morning. No sleep = errors galore, atop the ones I normally make. xD Good catch and thanks! And I never mind constructive criticism nor polite correction. It helps me a lot to have my mistakes pointed out to me; it helps me learn.
Because his little brother was safe at home, more than likely reading Tolkin again, while he was in some forgotten lot being used by a man that was grunting out Ryan’s name.
OMG...!!! I can totally hear Alexx's, "MY POOR BABY!"
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Loved the first one, it's so Ryan *g*
*randomly bursts into tears* Kyle, no *huggles* It's not fair.
Well written, I just saw one tiny thing, if you don't mind me saying:
'But there again, blood was slick before it dried.'
Should probably be But then again...'
Other than that, well done, very emotional, and Kyle just loves Ryan and...and...*cries again*
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I could never see young!Ryan just loving to dance. It'd mess with sense of order, ya know. Sure I can see him going to a bar or club, maybe, with a friend or something to have a few drinks but after awhile I'd think he'd get a little uncomfortable with the chaos. Now - Older!Ryan - I'm pretty sure he's got firm control of his OCD tendencies and everything but being out on a crowded dance floor after awhile, among all those sweaty bodies. . .not so sure he could stick it out for long periods. Small does, ya know.
*smacks self* Yeah, this is what I get for writing so freaking early in the morning. No sleep = errors galore, atop the ones I normally make. xD Good catch and thanks! And I never mind constructive criticism nor polite correction. It helps me a lot to have my mistakes pointed out to me; it helps me learn.
Yeah, for some reason ( ... )
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OMG...!!! I can totally hear Alexx's, "MY POOR BABY!"
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