Chaco: Aquitania (part 1)

[tansyhl]

Feeling reckless with pre-trip exhiliration, so going ahead  and posting first part of 1st chapter....

Chapter the First-Aquitania

Under the calendar of the Christian religion it was Anno Domini Nostri Jesu Christi  762.  Methos was reasonably comfortably situated in Aquitania[1], where Childeric III, also known as the Idiot, had been shipped

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[tansyhl]

Thanks Tray,,,,I guess the footnotes are kinda silly, but I'm really enjoying the challenge of trying to fit this into a real historic context. Over the top, but fun.

Now, all I need to do is figure out what Darius is going to say exactly... Were so few actual scenes with him that it's a challenge getting his voice right.

Thanks for commenting!

[dswdiane]

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You know Tansy, I could do the editing better if you sent me the text in email.

This is very good, however. I think you're doing a good job, historically and plot wise.

I think the paragraphs need to be a bit shorter to allow the reader to digest all the information.

I think a bit more personal information about Methos between the historical facts would make it an easier read. I'm not quite sure how to help you with that unless you send it to me by email to edit.

I think some of the footnotes would be more easily explained within the context of the story, but on the other hand, I am so worn out and exhausted that maybe I am lazy right now.

I'm really looking forward to more of this.

And I have been watching a lot of episodes lately with Darius in them. I'd be happy to help you with his voice.

[weesam]

What an intriguing beginning. Can't wait for you to return and feed us some more. History being one of my favourite things I really like the historical detail you are putting into this.