Excerpt from work in progress

[tankpixie]

I promised to inflict some of my writing on those willing to play critic, so here's the first couple of chapters of a novel I'm currently working on (no title as of yet).  Please forgive any typos.  Constructive criticism is welcome.

I stood beside the bed in the dark and looked down at him. How is it a 38-year-old, 6-foot, 210-pound man

Comments

[miari]

Dayum! I knew you wrote, but I didn't have a clue as to how good you are at it. Brava, sweetie!

[tankpixie]

Baby, you just made my day! MWUAH!

[miari]

Just being honest, hon:)