Comments | tameless_hearts: RP planny thing for <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/feathersnspirit">feathersnspirit</a></strong>, for compiling later into Allergies Part 2

tameless_hearts

RP planny thing for feathersnspirit, for compiling later into Allergies Part 2

May 17, 2009 15:53

((Okay! I'm going to write the bulk of the post here, and leave off at certain points for you to add your input, which will be worked in to the growing posty thing. This doesn't need to go like usual RP/threads. You can just reply with a mun's note of what she would do, or write a narrative RP response. Whatever you're motivated to do to help ( Read more... )

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WRONG MUSE...SORREH!!! ilu bb oceanic_child May 17 2009, 23:58:40 UTC

I think it'd be the four adults. Out just because. Chelsea'd be polite but a little annoying about warning the waiter about the allergy because she's just awesome like that. They'd probably just BS about whatever; work, Rory, cracking jokes about some aspect of the Great Adventure.

Once The Incident occurs and they're sure he's going to survive it, Chelsea and Jody'd probably march their ways to the kitchen and demand to know who the asshole was that almost killed her husband/her brother. I can just see James following behind and just laughing at these two diminutive women raising hell when they talk to a manager.

Re: WRONG MUSE...SORREH!!! ilu bb tameless_hearts May 18 2009, 19:25:48 UTC

Okay, here's the whole thing as I have so far. I need suggestions on the pacing/reality of it. Does the chain of events seem realistic? I've bolded a couple places where I need some additions. In addition, if you want to insert snippets in here and there, please do. If you think things need moved around or clarified, I'd love the input. (( A mun's note, I have never personally dealt with anaphylaxis. I don't know anyone who has. On that note, I have done my best using the internet as my guide. If this is a personal subject to you, maybe you should skip this post. I'm not sure how upsetting it might be ( ... )

Re: WRONG MUSE...SORREH!!! ilu bb tameless_hearts May 18 2009, 19:26:36 UTC

"You look like hell," he heard James say from across the table.

A strained laugh. "Thanks." Marcus rubbed his neck again, working out the itching that was spreading down his skin. Not a good sign.

Another wave of coughing hit him hard enough to cause his stomach to clench, sending nausea flooding down his body. The wolf inside lifted its head, fully on alert. Something was definitely wrong.

He tried to inhale, but found his throat was uncooperative. Unable to speak, he snapped his fingers loudly and pointed at the purse sitting on the floor next to Chelsea's chair. (( I'm not sure what either of your girls might say/do at this point. Halp? )) Dimly he heard a shout, "Call 911!!" and the room grew quiet. It was too much to hope that the silence was his own brain cutting off his senses. Every eye in the place was on him. He felt the needle jab into his leg followed by the familiar burn of the adrenaline finding its way into his bloodstream ( ... )

Re: WRONG MUSE...SORREH!!! ilu bb tameless_hearts May 18 2009, 19:27:05 UTC

He tried to talk to her, tell her he was okay, he was in good hands. She put a hand on his forehead, quieting him.

Marcus's hand moved slowly, shaking as it crossed empty space to lay on her belly. A flutter of movement under his fingers and he smiled. Her hand closed over his and his eyes fluttered closed again. If the worst should happen, he'd said his goodbye.

(( Not sure if you want to add some stuff here, what they do while he's off being taken care of. I figure he'll be in the back for an hour or so before they let anyone see him. ))