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talkstocoyotes

Chapter 28, Part 1

Jul 19, 2009 12:33

At the bottom of the outside staircase Ennis scanned the shoreline and Lake uneasily, thinking how cold the water was even in June and how quickly it could overcome a swimmer deliberately putting the shoreline behind him. Seeing nothing out of place off the beach was only slightly reassuring, as the fog had moved closer and now appeared as drapes ( Read more... )

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acht_acht July 19 2009, 18:57:22 UTC

Wow! More!

elena_62 July 19 2009, 19:22:40 UTC

I wouldn't mind seeing soon chapter 28, part 2...

Thank you for writing!

Ciao

Antonella

acht_acht July 19 2009, 19:47:24 UTC

Wow, beautiful and intense evocative ... I was waiting to hear David´s story- really heartbreaking. Loved the image of Ennis searching for David in the mist, both of them feeling their way through strange territory, kind of.

And a little typo alert:
They were up on the ledge, surrounded by the umbrella of cream-colored, cross-shaped blooms on the dogfood tree

Thanks for spotting it! talkstocoyotes July 20 2009, 14:34:27 UTC

I just corrected that -- it was a companion blunder to a reference in an earlier chapter to Mrs. Twist's "bee casserole".

tommyknocker July 19 2009, 21:01:21 UTC

I was so happy to see this updated. =)
Found this story on FanFiction.net initially and really enjoyed it. It was several months ago that I read through it and I thought it was funny that I didn't have to skim back any to recap what had happened. Guess this is just one of the ones that stuck out my mind. =)
Thanks for writing and thank you for updating.
Can't wait to see more.

Jennifer

talkstocoyotes July 20 2009, 14:35:17 UTC

Thanks so much for the encouragement, y'all!