Gift of Exile -- Chapter 11

[talkstocoyotes]

Try as he might, sleep wouldn’t take no for an answer forever. It hadn’t crept up on him or drifted over him but had clubbed him over the head. Or maybe, he thought as Sincie carefully picked her way down the slopes, it was like Curt had mentioned once about surgery he’d had years ago: no drowsiness, just looking up at the doctor one minute and

Comments

jack and ennis back on brokeback

[ifyoucantfixit1]

dear dear girl; this is so lovely, and ethereal. the real and spiritworld intertwined. no beginning and no ending. has ever been and always will be. they have loved, they do love, and they will always love. love without end forever and ever and always. and jack telling him to go on and live the life he is in to the fullest. he will always be there. that should be the reassurance that ennis needs to go forward...he knows no guilt now only love. this is a great way for them to be...thank you marcia.....i love this story, thank you for bringing it to us. janice

[lalaynia]

Very touching, and your description of the afterlife is hopeful, spiritual (no pun intended) and very comforting. What a love Jack is, to focus his energy on becoming closer to Ennis in death than he was in life. And then to do his best to free Ennis of guilt for "being unfaithful"- Telling him he's a widower and demanding sweetly and lovingly that Ennis get out there and dance. Don't waste the time you have pining, but do some good and share some love with someone else who needs it.

Reminds me of a favorite scene from Harold and Maude-"But you can't die. I love you!!" "Oh, that's wonderful! Now go and love some more."

I really really like the attitude you have and the way you think. I look forward to the next chapters.

[joetheone]

This was a good way to put this and I liked how Ennis went back to the diner. Joe

[valleyview]

Absolutely LOVED this. Beautifully well-written. One of the many etehreal touches I particularly liked was when you wrote something to the effect that "Ennis wondered how many of those shadowy corridors and doorways they'd wandered through." You take the metaphysical aspect of your story to some very interesting places. Thank you!...and let's hope you have more goodies to share with us.

[ky77ccl]

"He would never again go to Brokeback in this life, not until someone took his own ashes to scatter."

I suppose that shouldn't make me sad... but it does. I guess it makes me sad 'cause it feels like closing off a happy place. But I suppose it's less sad if he lets other happy places open up?

[talkstocoyotes]

Sorry, jumped the gun on this in my reply at the last chapter. Yeah, he will be seeing other places after the next few chapters, which I'll try to keep fairly short. They're basically transitional.