I loved this! You've done a masterful job of weaving the bits and pieces given by Tolkien in with your own writing to give us a fully-fleshed scene. This is exactly how I imagine this scene from Merry's perspective, with his pain, muddled thinking and despair. And I also liked how you started it with a drowning dream that blends into the orc-draught. Thanks for sharing this with us :)
What a lovely thing to hear, that this is how you imagined this scene as well! Tells me I managed to stay faithful to the flavour of the original. I was hoping I hadn't made Merry *too* despairing.
I'll be sending "part 3" to Marigold soon, so hope you get a chance to read it. I'd be interested in your thoughts.
This was a marvelous take on one of my favorite parts of the book. You seamlessly wove all the elements of the book with Merry's thoughts and feelings and it was great to see how he got that cut protecting Pippin, then Pippin returning the favor by taking care of him. Lovely job! Thanks for writing this and for sharing it with the rest of the class. :-)
Yes, we learn quite a lot from each other, don't we?
Since Pippin didn't know how Merry had got the cut on his forehead, I figured he must have been struck down before that happened, and if he was struck down then Merry must have fallen defending him. Made sense, anyhow. But with such a blow to the head, and him admitting he was about done in, it was a good thing Pippin was there to take charge.
Am hoping to see part 3 posted sometime this week. That will complete the set.
A wonderful look at how things happened from Merry's point of view! Merry's thoughts were very well done! I like the way you started it with Merry dreaming about the river, it would be a shock to realize that was not what was happening at all! Thank you!
What a fascinating blend of canon, Our Movie, and Bakshi's animated "Lord of the Rings." I must confess, I was hoping that this was a continuation of your first story of the same title, because I enjoyed that so much. But this darker, more serious stood on its own and is equally good if not so light. Pippin is so brave - we hardly ever get to see him take the initiative. Your description of the forced march was chilling, and the description of the orcs' treatment of our lads made me glad all over again that they were dealt a just fate. Wonderful story.
Actually, it's a set, rather than a continuation. Same first line for three stories set in Pre- , During-, and Post-Quest.
What I also tried to show was a progression: Merry taking care of Pippin, then Pippin taking care of Merry, then both taking care of each other. Part 3 is nearly ready to post.
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I'll be sending "part 3" to Marigold soon, so hope you get a chance to read it. I'd be interested in your thoughts.
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Since Pippin didn't know how Merry had got the cut on his forehead, I figured he must have been struck down before that happened, and if he was struck down then Merry must have fallen defending him. Made sense, anyhow. But with such a blow to the head, and him admitting he was about done in, it was a good thing Pippin was there to take charge.
Am hoping to see part 3 posted sometime this week. That will complete the set.
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What I also tried to show was a progression: Merry taking care of Pippin, then Pippin taking care of Merry, then both taking care of each other. Part 3 is nearly ready to post.
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