Lullaby by Citrine

Aug 06, 2004 08:24

Smeagol comes home to his Granny after a day on the river...

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anonymous August 6 2004, 19:24:18 UTC
Wow! I have never read anything quite like that! You captured Smeagol so well! I would always guess that there would have been some good in him and regret over what he had done, I mean right after it happened! Very well done! Thank you!

Hai Took

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auntiemeesh August 6 2004, 19:43:20 UTC
Wonderful! This captures Smeagol so well, the lust for the Ring, the nastiness within him that allowed the Ring to claim him at first sight, the loss and sorrow of losing someone dear to him, but also the inability to face the terrible thing he had done to his dearest friend. I love the image of him sneaking out to put flowers in Deagol's hands, but also putting rocks over his eyes, as though he's trying to hide from Deagol's judgment.

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teawith August 7 2004, 02:35:56 UTC
Ooh, creepy! Particularly the last sentence. The ring claimed him so utterly and so suddenly, I think the madness it induced came across brilliantly well!

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lindelea1 August 8 2004, 18:46:33 UTC
How sad! And chilling... Poor Smeagol. He was just a hobbit, after all, and the Ring claimed him unawares. It was certainly a good thing for Bilbo that pity stayed his hand.

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beethovens7th August 11 2004, 07:05:03 UTC
Take a bow!
This was wonderful! When i first saw the discription I thought, hmm, eww, a story about gollum. I almost didn't read it. I'm ashamed!! and Thrilled that I did read it. FANTASTICALLY creepy!!!! I completely agree with all of the above comments made by others!!!! On thing i really like to see in these stories is Description! Tokien was very descriptive!! and so is this story. Very visual. I could SEE everything.

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