Comments | takhallus: before midnight

takhallus

before midnight

Jan 01, 2009 18:02

( Once upon a time there lived an unhappy young man named Gabriel Gray... )

Comments 6

levitatethis January 1 2009, 22:06:26 UTC

This is a very cool story! I like your own take on the Cinderella idea and how you've managed to rework it for the characters.

Nathan is such a jerk :-)

Love all the trouble Sylar goes through to not only see Mohinder but on his own terms...and I love the image of Mohinder stopping him from leaving the room by stepping in front of him and placing one hand to his chest which Sylar covers with his own.

Perfect ending for them!

takhallus January 1 2009, 22:13:32 UTC

The hand on the chest thing makes me shudder! Thanks for commenting, I love doing these fairy tale things!

speccygeekgrrl January 3 2009, 05:50:21 UTC

Ahh, I *love* fairy tale stories, and this one was wonderful!

Nathan makes a great ugly stepsister. xD

takhallus January 3 2009, 13:07:02 UTC

Thanks! I wanted to bring Peter in as well but I thought I'd be drifting off the story too much. I love writing Nathan!

brandinsbabe January 3 2009, 19:40:10 UTC

oh that was just lovely!! i wasn't sure if i was gonna like this cause i've seen some cinderella type stuff around, but this was so different! and really good! the description of them in the library was awesome. mohinder's hand brushing against his pocket, his hand on sylar's thigh. awesome :)

takhallus January 18 2009, 17:36:04 UTC

Thankyou! I am trying to get thigh brushing into every fic I write lol