Commentporn Post, Round 3

[t_eyla]

Hello! This is another commentporn post, like this one and this one.

Prompt me, and I will write you commentporn. First come first serve; I reserve the right to turn down a prompt if I don't know how to make it work. I will write as many prompts as I have inspiration for. Any pairing, any fandom, any kink, het, slash, femslash. Aaannd . . .

Go!

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Eleven/Rory, Part 3

[t_eyla]

"I can--oh. Right." Rory let go of the Doctor and stepped away, suddenly very conscious of the fact that he was naked save for a pair of white tennis socks with a big hole in the right heel. He watched the Doctor straighten up and turn around, and once again couldn't help his gaze dropping to the Doctor's crotch. "Ah. Will I--" He gestured somewhat helplessly. "I mean, do you have to, you know--"

"We're done, Rory." The Doctor looked around and grabbed his white cotton underpants from where he'd dropped them earlier. "You did well."

"I, um." Rory scratched the back of his neck. "Thanks. I guess."

Getting dressed took a lot shorter than getting undressed had. Within minutes, Rory was adjusting his vest, while the Doctor was tying his bowtie.

"Right." Rory straightened his t-shirt and eyed the door. "Shouldn't they be letting us out now?"

"Oh, they will." The Doctor sounded perfectly cheerful. "They're coming down the hallway right now; I can hear them."

"Super-hearing, too, huh?"

"Super-hearing, super-vision; I'm a Time Lord,

Re: Eleven/Rory, Part 3

[daphnie_1]

xD XD XD XD I AM LAUGHING SO MUCH I THINK I'M GOING TO CRY.

TEARS ON THE SIDE OF MY FACE XD XD

(your eleven voice is made of freaking WIN. It's so perfect, I could almost hear him).

[t_eyla]

Ahahaha, I'm glad you approve. I think this is by far the most awkward sex I've ever written.

Re: Eleven/Rory, Part 3

[mind_the_tardis]

I approve very much of your posting this to a comm. It wins. I can see it happening in canon. If canon, you know, ran on a channel you had to pay specifically for.

[t_eyla]

Ahahaha no, this shouldn't happen in canon. My embarrassment squick can barely take it in writing; if someone put that on my TV screen, I'd probably have to hide behind the sofa.

[mind_the_tardis]

But it sounds so IC. Seriously. You did this with that bit with Gene/Nelson, too. It's very matter-of-fact "And there was sex." Sex happened. I like it. No romance-novel frou-frou-ery, no need for the sex to be connected to love. Just, you know, sex. Very practical.

[t_eyla]

And then they done sex. xD

Well, Gene/Nelson was a fuckbuddy fic. Two guys who like to hang out and have a drink or two and fuck from time to time, because it's relaxing. Eleven and Rory . . . not so much with the fuckbuddies. ;)

But I know what you mean, I think. I can't stand it when people turn their characters into porn stars during the sex scenes. Sex, in its basic variety, is awkward. So when appropriate, let there be awkwardness.

[mind_the_tardis]

So when appropriate, let there be awkwardness.

Yep, that. Or people not making a big deal out of it, if it's in a situation where the people involved wouldn't consider it a big deal. Not that that applies to this fic-for Rory, at least.

[stars_fell]

Sex, in its basic variety, is awkward. So when appropriate, let there be awkwardness.

Thiiiiiiis. I always try to keep that in mind whenever I end up writing a porn log in the course of RP.

[t_eyla]

Ah, yeah, it's especially important in RP. Or at least I find it is. RP is all about characterization, even more so than fic, and dropping characterization for the sake of porn star hotness is just not in the spirit of the exercise.

Re: Eleven/Rory, Part 3

[quean_of_swords]

My roommate probably thinks I'm insane, I'm laughing so hard. AWESOME.

[t_eyla]

Hee, thank you. Glad you enjoyed it!

Re: Eleven/Rory, Part 3

[fanbot]

Brilliant!

[t_eyla]

Thank you!

Re: Eleven/Rory, Part 3

[eclecticmuse]

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OH MY DEAR LORD. This was so awkward was reading while covering my face with my hands and peeking through my fingers. Slash is really not my cup of tea at all, but I was laughing hysterically all through this. Perfect spot-on characterization and heaps of lols to go with it. Good job! I find myself wanting to read a sequel where Rory has sex with Amy to make himself feel better.

[t_eyla]

Thank you! There probably won't be a sequel like that, but I am glad I inspired the desire for one. xD