Comments | szaleniec1000: Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 21

szaleniec1000

Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 21

Apr 15, 2013 21:09

And here's the rest.

( Chapter 21 )

balance of stupidity, show don't tell, the mirror of ytidun, did not do the bloody research, pov!fail, facepalming in frustration, killing the sue is too much to hope for, americanisms in the potterverse, mary sue and gary stu, have i mentioned i hate this fic, damning with faint praise, delicious appendage, hermione in name only, scraping the comedy barrel, credit where it's due, convention of the psychics, minerva is ooc, wibbly-wobbly timey-wimey stuff, all your base are belong to us, onion slicing convention, bad sex, a description would be nice, clip show, department of redundancy department, too much information, completely nonsexual, i can has characterisation, sexism, pop goes the house-elf, you fail feminism forever, nudity for everyone, disembodied dialogue, harry potter, badfic:hogwarts too exposed, frost resistance, continuity isn't optional, approved hogwarts exposed dialogue voice, it's full of filler

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warlock_female April 15 2013, 23:42:58 UTC

Oooooh, now EVERYONE dies!

No, they'll all get better and blah blah blah because we can't ever have anything bad happening to our leads.

This story is making me into a horrible person. AS soon as I read that the three girls were tending the hurt my first thoughts were "Oh course they are. Stuck up little snots."

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szaleniec1000 April 16 2013, 01:08:37 UTC

Yeah, where was it with its ultra-specific prophecies during Voldemort's reign? Did it turn up five minutes before his defeat with Starbucks?

I take it the mirror isn't something he lifted from Psychic Serpent, then?

sith_droideka April 16 2013, 01:00:53 UTC

What's next chapter? Emily and Caitlin pseudo-incestuousnesses?

szaleniec1000 April 16 2013, 01:07:19 UTC

That's entirely offscreen, thankfully, and much of the WTF is provided by how Harry and Hermione react. There's also the Jamie/Alex "joining" scene after which the chapter is named, taking up almost a third of its word count; however bad you're expecting it to be, it's worse.

sickbritkid2 April 16 2013, 08:03:06 UTC

Ugh. I think I'd prefer the Caitlin/Emily 69...

szaleniec1000 April 16 2013, 09:03:23 UTC

It, at least, isn't 3000 words long.

fly_buggy_fly April 16 2013, 01:30:04 UTC

Annnnnd she can just use the time turner to go back and stop him?

undying_embers April 16 2013, 03:26:38 UTC

I'm confused. Did Neil actually say that he would retcon chapter 23 out of existence, or does he just never mention it again?

szaleniec1000 April 16 2013, 06:35:21 UTC

Never mentions it again.