Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 11 part 1

[szaleniec1000]

Previously on Hogwarts Exposed, there were some courtroom shenanigans, naked photos and some shit about a censor box.

Comments

[warlock_female]

I don't recall that far back, seeing as this story isn't on my list of 'important shit', but were the pictures taken at the same place? And if not, does that mean that either the entire family has a crazed stalker who takes nude pictures of them, or did the paper just get in luck and have two people send the same sort of pictures at the same time?

[szaleniec1000]

Crazed stalker. I don't recall whether we find out who it actually is.

[szaleniec1000]

I hate that set-up. Ron is evil for cheating on Hermione even though she doesn't love him. If anything, Ron is the more sympathetic character in that situation.

Interesting you mention Brazil, because there's a throwaway piece of dialogue in the first Hogwarts Exposed that Harry and Hermione would rather get married in Brazil away from the gaze of the wizarding media. A reference, or just coincidence?

*cringe* Why do people write these puff-piece, telling-not-showing bits of dialogue that tell us nothing non-obvious? I can't write this kind of glad-handing.

It's a complete waste of words. Sam likes the person who came to her rescue: what were the odds?

Since this is her POV, surely she *knows* whether or not she's got morning sickness? Or at least whether she's feeling nauseous?

You've probably already seen this, but anyone for Quidditch?

[zelda_queen]

"It's a complete waste of words. Sam likes the person who came to her rescue: what were the odds?"

Not only that, but I get the feeling that Neil just stole that bit from Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire, when Mr. Weasley notes that he likes Ludo Bagman. It actually made sense there, because Percy was talking about how incompetent Bagman was and Mr. Weasley was coming to his defense. Here, it's just stupid.

[szaleniec1000]

Dialogue where character X praises character Y has one very specific function: to serve as a counterpoint to other dialogue by character Z talking about how dreadful Y is. As in your example. As ever, conflict is the soul of drama. It's boring to read and, like otakukeith, I'd struggle even to write a dialogue where everyone's just agreeing and singing each other's praises all the time.

[sickbritkid2]

Judge Ebony recommends the Count Chocula Blood Surprise.

And for entertainment, there are private screenings of Das Nightmare Before Christmas.

[sickbritkid2]

Hermione has just entered the scene and we're already in her POV.

I think I concur with RageComic!Hermione: The narrative viewpoint of Hogwarts Exposed is so erratic and random, even Krum and Harry would have a damned hard time finding it.

Golden Snitch? HAH!

[sickbritkid2]

“Remember Emily thought she saw lightning and that it was about to shower? The flash was most likely made by a wizardcam.”

Emily Zacherley: Intelligent, eloquent, and completely incapable of telling the difference between a camera flash and a lightning arc. They are, quite literally, two ENTIRELY DIFFERENT types of flash, in both color and intensity.

[szaleniec1000]

Rage!Emily's début should be soon. I've not really had a chance to do much with her yet.

[sickbritkid2]

Well, at least you have some fodder for later.

I mean, really!? Had there actually been lightning that night, then maybe I could take that instance as almost Rowling-level foreshadowing, because then that would've been rather clever.

However, we're supposed to buy that Emily, who is supposed to be this smart, passionate witch(tm)*, would somehow mistake a bright, very intense yellow magnesium/zirconium flash for a far-less bright blue-white lightning arc, which generally lingers far longer as well.

* Or, in a more snarky sense: Her sister but smaller and more irrational.

[szaleniec1000]

Especially as the entire point of a camera flash is to illuminate its target. If it could have been mistaken for lightning in the distance, as opposed to a particularly bright flash in a thunderstorm that was actually going on, then it wasn't doing its job properly.

I've got four new comics up today. No Emily yet, but as you say fodder for later.