Comments | szaleniec1000: Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 24 part 7

szaleniec1000

Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 24 part 7

Sep 23, 2011 23:40

I still can't believe that previous post. Nor the one it was in reply to, gushing about what a strong character HE!Hermione is compared to other versions of her in fanfic. I don't even want to think what they were like.

( Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 24 )

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zelda_queen September 24 2011, 01:29:08 UTC

"In other news, I'm sketching out a plot for a 'Hogwarts Exposed Reloaded' in my head, which I'll post when it's more coherent."

What's that? A parody rewrite?

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zelda_queen September 24 2011, 04:23:03 UTC

If you take out the misogyny, pedophilia, and overall sex obsessions then yes, it probably will be. Not that that would be a bad thing, by any stretch of the imagination.

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warlock_female September 24 2011, 02:03:27 UTC

Well... at least the Sue isn't the OMG! virgin in mind and body until she sleeps with her one love? At least it gives me smething newish to read about. And the unicorn was only attracted to her because she's so pure and shit! It's what unicorns do!

I would love the next chapter to be "How Jamie found out she really HAD failed her O.W.L.S. and is now being held back a year. So now she has to study like a real student."

fly_buggy_fly September 24 2011, 03:05:13 UTC

This does not look like an authentic diary entry. It's got a semicolon in it and numbers written out as words, for goodness' sake. I'm not sure even Hermione would write her diary like that.

Not to defend Neil or anything, but...I write like that in my journal ._.

And I mean a pen-and-paper one, not my LJ. I actually have some quirks about writing numerals -- I just can't do it! And I looooove semicolons.

szaleniec1000 September 24 2011, 07:49:11 UTC

Fair play. Of course, any idea of what she'd write like is a wild guess considering how little characterisation she gets.

sickbritkid2 September 24 2011, 06:18:17 UTC

Considering she's a Sue-hybrid of Harry and Hermione, making her actually good at Divination would have been a way of making her even better than either. Of course, that would require imagination.

Like I said before: Neil was just plain schizophrenic in terms of portraying Jamie. One second, she's better than Hermione and Harry and easily the best witch who ever witched. The next, she's worse than Hermione and Harry despite being a combination of the two.

szaleniec1000 September 24 2011, 07:52:36 UTC

One second, she's better than Hermione and Harry and easily the best witch who ever witched. The next, she's worse than Hermione and Harry despite being a combination of the two.

And one second she's a prude and the next she's a nymphomaniac, as Keith pointed out.

sickbritkid2 September 24 2011, 06:22:32 UTC

"Hopefully, Harry won’t take points off, but I think some dark creatures are simply misunderstood, just like naturists."

I remember HG 131 comparing textilism(which is what I guess not-nudism is) to racism, once. Many lols were had.

Reminds me of this time a Latino rights activist compared the city of Farmer's Branch fining businesses that hire illegal immigrants to "Mississippi, Georgia, and Alabama back in 1965, but there's only one difference: we're brown."

I then went outside, explored the area, and determined he was full of shit when I noticed a distinct lack of Latinos hanging from street corner trees or Latino parades being broken up with riot police, German Shepherds, and high-powered, flesh-rending firehoses.

And, like before, many lols were had.

szaleniec1000 September 24 2011, 07:51:26 UTC

I remember HG 131 comparing textilism(which is what I guess not-nudism is) to racism, once. Many lols were had.

If so, he got it directly from the source. Assuming he's not the source himself. Hogwarts Exposed itself makes the same comparison.

szaleniec1000 September 24 2011, 07:56:13 UTC

And as a side-note, there was a documentary on naturism on the radio a few years ago (jokes about "doesn't that defeat the point of a documentary on naturism?" aside, it was quite informative) and apparently the word "textile" is used in naturist circles. Only, more as an equivalent of "Muggle" than as the slur Neil makes it into.

sickbritkid2 September 24 2011, 10:05:28 UTC

And that's another thing I've wanted to comment on:

1. How in the hell do you make a girl being fantastically racist against people who wear clothes work?

2. If you're gonna roll with that, are you then saying that racism is okay so long as it's pro-child nudity?! Didn't the Black Panthers basically show us that that sort of shit doesn't fly!?

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