Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 17 part 1

[szaleniec1000]

When last we left the godawful excuse for a character pretending to be Hermione Granger in this fic, she'd vanished into thin air. And nothing of value was lost.

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[fly_buggy_fly]

That’s him, the cubby boy at the table to the left.

He looks like a bear? Or maybe he's just an Ewok.

In any case, I feel sorry for this Ronald kid. He didn't know what he was getting in to when he was cast in this fic, apparently.

ALSO. The Q and O are NOWHERE near each other on the keyboard. HOW do you make that mistake??? Q.W.L.s my fat Polish dupa.

[szaleniec1000]

I wondered about this. They're right at opposite ends of the row! They do use the same finger on the Dvorak layout, though, so maybe he was typing with that.

[sickbritkid2]

Still, HOW many betas did Neil credit at the end of each chapter? Something like two on average, right? And NONE of them noticed that rather JARRING error?

[szaleniec1000]

Chapter 1: two betas and a Britpicker, who if he stuck around did about as much good as the betas. Chapter 2: one beta and a "thanks for all the suggestions" person. Chapters 3-5: one beta. Chapter 6: one beta and one nudist website. Chapter 7: one beta. Chapter 8: no beta (might be worth comparing with 7 and 9 to see if this made any difference). Chapter 9-10: one beta. Chapter 11: two betas, no improvement. Chapters 12-13: two betas. Chapter 14 onwards: three betas. Draw your own conclusions.

And none of them, as you say, noticed Q.W.L.s. I'm certainly not excusing the error, just trying to figure out how the hell it could have happened in the first place.

[tony_branston]

Does the one guy being castrated ever become important enough to warrant this second mention?

[szaleniec1000]

Not as far as I can tell. It's just a way for the author to beat us over the head with "HEY, THE GREAT ONE IS EVIL!" It's not even as meaningful as the author intended because there's no reason magical medicine couldn't have restored him, since it's implied to have been done with Muggle tools rather than a curse if the torture scene later in the chapter is anything to go by.

[szaleniec1000]

The thing about writing mysteries is that if you're going to make your first suspect into the real villain, the suspects you introduce later on have to be convincing enough to throw the reader off the scent. And Neil doesn't do convincing.

[drakethedragon]

I bet anything though that was probably intentional.

[sickbritkid2]

"'Professor Potter, wherever she is, she’s naked. She has no clothes,'"

And thus we take another trip to the Redundant Department of Redundancy Department.

[szaleniec1000]

Our friend on TVTropes tried to argue that the Hogwarts Exposed fics totalling 700,000 words is an impressive achievement even leaving aside the content and the writing, but it's really not when the same story could have been told in 100,000.

[sickbritkid2]

I'd ask where, precisely, he said that, as I didn't see it anywhere we were arguing with him, but then I realized that I don't care, anymore, as that fucker's gone from Tropes...for good.

[szaleniec1000]

His forum ban thread was epic. He tried to claim that he'd never been trolling LJ when his IP address was on anon comments all over the place.

[sickbritkid2]

"She sent owls to the balance of the staff"

Congratulations, Neil. You've taken a common vocabulary word and completely destroyed it...