Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 14

[szaleniec1000]

Here we go again.

Comments

[fly_buggy_fly]

They must have spent a whole ten minutes in the store with no one even having a yearning to try anything on.

Clearly, the author has never been clothes shopping with a girl before. Ten minutes is NOT a long time, unless the selection is miniscule.

Also -- A hem five inches above the knee is no more appropriate for a school dance than the see-through robes.

...I hate this fic too.

And yet, to defend(?) it? I actually like Ron's reaction to their thinking he's gay, because I can totally see him as a big homophobe who would be upset about people thinking that.

[szaleniec1000]

I've known girls who don't make a big thing of clothes shopping, but this chapter establishes Hermione, Jamie and Caitlin as girls who do indeed make a big thing of clothes shopping. Good catch on the ten minutes. :D

That would certainly have raised eyebrows at my school. The informal rule was that skirts couldn't be shorter than an inch above the knee. For socials there wasn't really a dress code, but five inches would be going too far. Especially as the girls aren't adult height or described as being particularly tall or long-legged

[szaleniec1000]

Lycanthropy makes you unable to control your urges and that makes you bi. Which is even worse.

This version of Hermione makes Hermione the Death Eater of Betrayed Revenge look in character. And nobody from Betrayed Revenge even has a character.

It's supposed to make her look mature, but she just comes across as disturbed. Granted she's been through a horrific ordeal, but I thought the unicorn was supposed to have chased away her trauma. I can't believe I just typed that sentence.

I know they were neglected in canon too, but the great thing about fanfic is people can fill in the blanks. It's just that nobody seems to. :(

[scarsofloki]

Fuck this fic. If my (bisexual) boyfriend had that poor impulse control, he wouldn't be my boyfriend for long. I don't have anything against him shagging other men (as long as he doesn't run off with one) but seriously, impulse control is important!

I thought it rather odd how Caitlin went from U GAIZ SEX IS SO BOOTIFUL AND PURE <3 to D= HARRY WON'T MARRY YOU IF YOU PUT OUT, WATER U DOING MUM!

...Hufflepuffs are particularly good finders!

[amideadn0w]

Do we need to be reminded in EVERY chapter about how much Jamie looks like Goddess Hermione? For the love of crickets, we get it. Even if I had the attention spam of a fly I would've gotten it now. I don't understand why he needs to be so repetitive over a fact that doesn't seem to be playing any sort of significant role

[scarsofloki]

Re: Sexuality: Yeah, well, they could always go to the twins for a lark and the twins would be all, "Oh, we knew he was gay, he was sleeping with some guy named Peter every night." And then everyone would be all, "Oh, okay then."

Poor Snape. Just... poor Snape. Poor anyone-who-has-to-deal-with-Neil's-OC's, really.

[szaleniec1000]

I can't feel too sorry for HE!Snape. He's such a big bland pile of meh in this story. I feel sorry for canon!Snape for being warped into that.

[scarsofloki]

That's pretty much what I meant. I feel sorry for Snape for being subjected to qanonreip. I mean, the most I can imagine, in terms of him becoming nicer, is grudgingly, privately admitting that just because Harry physically resembles James doesn't mean that he's as big a prat. He wouldn't do a complete 180 in attitude, but he might be just a liiiiittle bit less antagonistic.

[eaglevision1999]

Negative implications about qeerness and inappropriate dresses aside (because it's already been mentioned), a modesty charm would be actually useful even for reasonably long skirts and dresses. Only, wouldn't it make more sense if you could disable it with your wand when you need to instead of refreshing the charm every hour? Why do I see a panty shot coming? This reeks of cheap plot enabeller...
I also hate the implication that women should only dress for men...
Well, the whole fic is very sexistand drops weird anvils every chapter. Weirdest author tract ever.

[szaleniec1000]

Why do I see a panty shot coming? This reeks of cheap plot enabeller...

I've not read that far ahead, but I can already imagine how it goes. The modesty charm and its limitations get mentioned >9000 times throughout the course of the scene, pre-empting its inevitable failure and destroying any impact it might have had. Ginny's dress all over again. By all accounts the author doesn't get any better at the technical side of writing as the saga continues, which is quite an achievement as most people who write 700,000 words of text will at least learn something from the experience.

[sickbritkid2]

"Fade to black."

When I read this, I was picturing you saying it with this disgusted, rather annoyed tone of voice like "Ugh. Fade to black!"

[szaleniec1000]

It was an actual fade to black there, but I can see where that impression came from. :D We haven't had any redundant "insert tab A into slot B" type narration yet, but it wouldn't surprise me in the least if we did later on.

[sickbritkid2]

IIRC, I think Neil tried to put some graphic sex scenes in on at least one occasion(Emily and Caitlin eating each other out), but it was snipped by one of his betas, or something.

And thank god for that...