Taking Sharpe

[sylvene_fic]

SHARPE

He didn’t want to talk about it.  He didn’t want to dwell upon it.  He didn’t even want to think about it, but his mind would not let it go.  He hurled another pebble into the river.  No, he was NOT jealous of finding Edrington in Arthur’s quarters.  No, he was NOT guilty about having bedded Edrington.  Dammit… Arthur had bloody told

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[mooms]

Beautifully done, although I can't say that I really see Sharpe with Wellington. The thought of Hakeswill and Sharpe makes me shudder and I'm glad that Arthur rescues him, though.

[viggosterri]

awesome

[govi20]

It's wonderful, you're absolutely great ! Like mooms, I am not in the Wellington either, but I just imagine someone else and thast works for me. I so much enjoy your Sharpe, I can't tell you. I am commenting backwards, as I am so far behind reading.

[sylvene_fic]

You guys are so encouraging. :) Thanks for continuing to read

[sharpiefan]

I do like your writing. You have a good grasp of grammar - which can be singularly lacking in fanfic!

However, I noticed echoes in this of some of farothiel's stuff. If this was intentional, it would be nice to credit her as having inspired you.

The active Sharpe fandom on LJ is pretty small, and it's lovely that you're writing in it. If you need inspiration, take a look into the canon - or even into the history (which is fascinating on its own merits) and see what else you can come up with.

Don't stop writing, but explore the canon a little, and don't feel you have to limit yourself to just one OTP (I know I don't!).

I hope my criticism has been constructive. If anything I've said has upset you, please let me know; I'm just trying to help.

[sylvene_fic]

However, I noticed echoes in this of some of farothiel's stuff. If this was intentional, it would be nice to credit her as having inspired you.
There was? *worries* Hmm... I'll have to re-read her stuff. If there were similarities, it's subconscious. :(

I hope my criticism has been constructive. If anything I've said has upset you, please let me know; I'm just trying to help.
Yes, it has. No, it has not. Thank you. :) I really *do* appreciate it. I'm new at this stuff and am still struggling with it.

I still have to absorb / respond to LC - on a quick read (still at work here) she picked up on all the bits that I was struggling with.

Yes, I need to finish watching the series and reading the books (not to mention more research) but I also like having a record of my nasty writing. Weird, I know... but I learn that way. I tend to edit / re-edit instead of keeping versions - bad me.

P.S. Would you link me a list of FanFic commonly used Acronyms? I'm not understanding OC / OTT / OTP Thanks again.

[sharpiefan]

The strongest echo I noticed was in the paragraph beginning: That was first time that Arthur had ever touched him. It took me straight back to Assistance... that scene was not actually in the book, where you next see Sharpe back with his mates before leaving camp with Lawford.

[sylvene_fic]

Bad me... checking this out while at work. Luckily it was a drabble. Very powerful image.

Far as I can recall... I was re-reading Sharpe's Tiger when I wrote this and I took from Canon that Sharpe was pointed to a stool and couldn't pick it up to re-position it and drew from that, the likelihood he would have difficultly getting up again. Farothiel's "Assistance" conjures a powerful image and I wouldn't deny that it was probably a subconscious amalgamation of the two scenes in my mind.

Good writing and powerful images tend to inspire. :) Definitely. I'll credit her for the inspiration. Thanks for pointing out the reference.

Back to work for me.