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'The Dead Angle' for Ataraxistence

Oct 03, 2010 16:34

For: ataraxistence
Title: The Dead Angle
Characters: All of Rikkai, Kaido
Rating: R
Summary: ”If you must play, decide upon three things at the start: the rules of the game, the stakes, and the quitting time.”
Warnings: violence, some sex.
Disclaimer: These characters are not mine. I just play with them.
A/N: This is my first time writing D1. I hope the world ( Read more... )

fic, round 2, rated: r

Comments 7

monarchist October 3 2010, 19:19:35 UTC

Wow. Just wow.

I'm in utter amazement at this fic, seriously. Dramatic, dark, gritty, hot. Niou's inner monologue at their first meeting had me laughing.

And the end. I love Yagyuu at the end. He's a magnificent bastard and so appropriate. :D

ataraxistence October 3 2010, 20:04:07 UTC

OH MY GOD THIS IS MY PRESENT WHO ARE YOU, YOU AMAZING PERSON?!

(I must apologise in advance, there is going to be CAPSLOCK ABUSE BECAUSE NOTHING ELSE CAN POSSIBLY EXPRESS THE DEPTHS OF MY AWE.)

What did I love about this fic? Well, EVERYTHING, really, but specifically? Niou's the star of the show (although that final image of Yagyuu covered in blood is incredibly compelling), I think. Your characterisation of Niou pushes all my buttons - acerbic, witty, darkly humorous: "Blow everything up. Then piss on the cinders." That's SUCH a Niou line - that, and "What can I say? I'm an entrepreneur." ♥ His portrayal of the way the Troika met was pure sarcastic GOLD - and I loved how you used a scriptwriting style in that portion. It really emphasised the cinematic quality of Niou's imagination and it didn't disturb the flow of the story itself in the least. If anything it made it better, insofar as ANYTHING THIS GOOD COULD BE MADE BETTER BY A COMPONENT PART OF ITSELF ( ... )

umarekawareru October 15 2010, 17:55:14 UTC

Okay, so now the cat's out of the bag: hi! I can't possibly tell you how happy I am you liked this fic, seriously, it was a real challenge to write because I was not sure if you'd like this kind of story, and when I saw your comment I was just incredibly happy that you enjoyed it after all. ♥ ♥ Even reading your comment now puts a smile on my face! :)

I am much too old now to be writing tennis boys' romance, and a dark AU was the only way I felt I could do these two justice. Really, I'm so so so glad that you liked it and left such a detailed comment! Comments like this are worth every minute of writing work. Much love to you! ♥ ♥

kedi_kedi October 4 2010, 01:00:41 UTC

Ooooooh this fic was gooooood. It was really well written throughout. I liked the undercurrent of evil dealings, and even though the storyline was very bleak, the ending was completely the opposite. Your D1 was utterly hot. Omg, Yagyuu and that gun, the sexy bastard. There's something about Yagyuu and gun wielding that's dead sexy. The way you described him mowing down those guards and he's just like 8 | was brutal and hilarious at the same time XDDD

It's a pity there isn't more, I have such a kink for sci fi/space fics, the ending left so much to be anticipated, but it was a really good ending!

lucathia_rykatu October 6 2010, 03:17:21 UTC

There were quite a few phrases you used that I thought were beautiful (such as this one: The liquid fire of the vodka burns Niou’s throat on its way down and settles uneasily in his stomach, like a bad omen. Simple, but it made me feel Niou's unease). They really made this fic work for me, and I loved the description at the end too, about how Niou and Yagyuu took things into their own control, how Yagyuu looked like he was merely back from a leisurely stroll...

Yukimura's last words to Niou made me think that somehow things were going to go wrong, that Yukimura was going to show up after ten days, which I still think is very possible, but I'm hoping Niou and Yagyuu manage to get out!

everlind October 10 2010, 18:33:43 UTC

Hot damn I need MORE of this. I want to beg for more and yet this was so perfectly executed, so perfectly wrapped up and so damn good that I don't want to change a single thing about it.

Your D1 is amazing and damned hot in their complete gun wielding awesomeness. Their interactions with one other, not to mention Niou's with Yukimura were golden.

I loved this sentence particularly:

Ahead of him Yagyuu is giving out bullets like candy, adding casual genocide to a list of crimes too long to remember, and Niou thinks: gorgeous.

Amazing job anon-san, I can't wait to see who you are (for then I will have to stalk your other fic)