'Seatbelts' for the Switching it up community

Sep 30, 2010 16:46

For: switching_it_up
Title: Seatbelts
Characters: Niou, Yagyuu, Yanagi, Yukimura.
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Most people would probably say it was the end of something - his life as Masaharu, a rich brat who hacked too much in his too-often free time. It was the beginning of a lot of chaos, though, and as someone very partial to chaos Niou likes to say that it ( Read more... )

rated: pg-13, fic, round 2

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kedi_kedi September 30 2010, 22:10:10 UTC
There's something so sexy about this fic, I found. Maybe it's just the way you write or the dynamics between Niou and Yagyuu and the other characters, but it was very gritty and sexy. I also liked how you suddenly got a fuller picture at the end and you realised what went on before. I really enjoyed the way you write D1, they weren't too stereotypical of how they're usually written, the gentleman and trickster persona and all that, and I think that was what made it sexy, because they 'sounded' different, like you grappled them in a different way, made Yagyuu a bit more rough-edged and Niou a bit more anxious and wary and not all complete confidence. It's a pity there wasn't more of this fic, but for what it was, it really really liked this universe :D

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onlysayitonce October 15 2010, 16:08:56 UTC
I'm glad you said you found it sexy! I was kind of worried about that, because I was planning to work some kind of sex into this and, well, clearly I didn't. I'm also really glad the ending worked out, and the characterizations worked. Before I started planning my fic I read through what shin tenipuri I could find, and tried to reconfigure my ideas of D1 to fit it. I'm pleased it worked for you. :)

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lucathia_rykatu September 30 2010, 23:10:43 UTC
I really liked how this started out in the middle of things and then went back to show how everything started. I kept waiting for the scene to come back to the beginning. I was very amused that Yagyuu's mission was Niou, but Yukimura didn't tell him that. What must have been going on in Yagyuu's mind when he realized this? I also loved seeing Niou off-balance and Yagyuu so sure of himself. Though Niou sure pulled through at the end there. <3

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onlysayitonce October 15 2010, 16:13:25 UTC
I have a tendency to start in media res a lot, and sometimes I worry it isn't actually appropriate, so hearing that it worked for you makes me happy. I had a lot of fun imagining the different ways the conversation between Yagyuu and Yukimura could have gone, and I hope other people did too. Thanks for reading!

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xelloss_poo October 1 2010, 17:10:25 UTC
I second kedi_kedi. There was totally something awesome about this fic. And there really should be more of this universe. It was really rather hot. I have nothing more than this really.

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onlysayitonce October 15 2010, 16:20:09 UTC
It's great to hear that you liked it and found it sexy. Thanks!

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everlind October 2 2010, 14:40:15 UTC
Interesting setting and even more fascination was how you worked your story into this, it was a nice chance of pacing and intriguing.

The dynamic between them two was refreshing and new, without fully letting go of their original personalities. The glimpses we get of the others were well done, I especially liked Yukimura's intro there :)

It sexy and sort of dark, in a mysterious gritty sort of manner.

Loved it!

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onlysayitonce October 15 2010, 16:24:27 UTC
I'm glad you liked the pacing, and characters. I had a lot of fun setting up the atmosphere with this so it's great that you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading!

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crystalusagi October 3 2010, 09:52:32 UTC
I really enjoyed this and wanted more. XD I kind of squee'd a little when Niou shot the guy in the head. I dunno why, but. ^___^ I liked that bit.

I also really like the bit with the gun to Yagyuu's head. <3

This world is full of interesting things and I really enjoyed the fresh D1 dynamic here. Plus there are weapons. Weapons make things automatically better, I think XD

I hope you'll be writing more of this, anon-san =)

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onlysayitonce October 15 2010, 16:36:52 UTC
I really loved Niou stepping up at that end point, I'm glad you liked it too. I felt a bit bad leaving him so out of his element for the whole fic, and that made me feel a bit better.

I'm pleased you enjoyed this so much. I'm not sure if I'll be writing more, I've been kind of insanely busy lately. I had a lot of fun setting up the world, and I think it would be fun to write more about what happens for Niou and Yagyuu, so it's definitely a possibility.

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