Week 18, Title: This distance between us

[swirlsofblue]

Gia’s drinking black coffee in a cosy olive-walled café when she first sees him. The hairs at her nape stand on end inexplicably and cause her to turn. He’s wearing a trench-coat and his fedora is pulled down over his face, its wide brim shadows his mouth and chin from view. He’s here for her. The thought springs to her mind wildly, like church-

Comments

[ryl]

In order to fight darkness, you must first embrace the darkness within. Gia's got spirit.

[swirlsofblue]

Yep true. Thanks, and thank you for being a lovely intersection partner :)

[ryl]

You as well. :)

[i_17bingo]

I was really excited for this entry ever since reading Ryl's, and I was not remotely disappointed. I read it wide-eyed and tense, which I think was the point. I really loved the way that Gia seized her own destiny in this awful situation.

[swirlsofblue]

Thank you, so glad it had you wide-eyed :).

[bleodswean]

Ooooooh! Sci-fi/horror is something you've got the imagination and writing chops to do right! This is a nice, tightly written piece of suspense. I love the final line - nice to see her turn the tables on what is pursuing her...even if she did have to make some serious changes in order to effect this reversal. Great job!

[swirlsofblue]

Thank you, glad you liked the final line :)

[dmousey]

Nice! I love how this unfolded, and the ending satisfying. Hugs and peace~~~D

[swirlsofblue]

Thank you, glad you liked the way it unfolded :)

[beeker121]

This is more of a horror story, at least to me. I wonder what will become of Gia and her powers now that she's sent the shadow-man away?

[swirlsofblue]

Thank you :) The possibilities are endless.