have you seen me lately?

[tangleofthorns]

Title: Things I Remember About Me
Recipient: sangerin (thanks!)
Author: Luna
Website: Spark
Character/Pairing: Alex, minor Alex/Olivia
Warnings/Spoilers: Post-"Loss"
Summary: "Out of obscurity I came--to obscurity I can easily return."
Author's Note: Okay, it's quite a bit longer than I expected when I started; also, it's more of a general character story

Comments

[thenewhope]

*checks notebook*

You had sangerin.

(I'll be pack to read your story when I get a chance. ;)

[tangleofthorns]

danke. edited.

[theholyinnocent]

A very good characterization of Alex. I liked this very much.

[tangleofthorns]

I'm glad! Thanks for reading it.

[thenewhope]

Wow, that was really well done. Understated and clean and real. It left me feeling just as quietly lost as Alex.

I like the picture of Alex/Liv you painted - not quite a love story, but still with real emotion.

Your prose is slowly piercing, taking its time to get under my skin, still affecting me now, 20 mins after I finished reading it.

Thank you for the wonderful read!

[tangleofthorns]

what lovely feedback. *swoon.* thank you so much.

Your icon matches the story quite well, I see.

[mandysbitch]

Far.Out.

Not your usual style - you seem to write comparatively sparse in first person - but just as effective.

Somehow this sad, melancholy mood of just keeping time comes across. There's a little light touch on things - just enough to raise them and have them there but not overdo them: the girls who looks up cutting and the issues this throws up (Alex's hard line on the dangers of the modern world coming across in a quick exchange with a liberal minded teacher - I freaking loved that), everything that isn't said to Olivia, a strange relationship with Walter when she's not allowed to have relationships anymore. I loved all these things.

Seriously. It just hangs with me now - some of those words echoing in my head. I think you would be surprised at how effective this is.

And I'm totally having your babies, okay? ;)

[tangleofthorns]

I do think I write more sparsely in first person--there's less room for ornamentation when you're really narrowing it down to how someone would talk about herself.

I'm so happy that you dug the story. And I am surprised--it turned out better than I thought it would, I guess; the response has totally overwhelmed me.

As to babies, shall we name the first one Creed?

[mandysbitch]

And I am surprised--it turned out better than I thought it would, I guess; the response has totally overwhelmed me.

There's something about a sparse style and a light touch that makes you think you haven't put much into it - yet those elements seem to conspire to make it that much more effective. Sometimes I think good writing is an accident (well for me it is...).

As to babies, shall we name the first one Creed?

Dude - we're naming them ALL Creed.

[mikee_pm]

that was an excellent story. great characterization of alex.
you managed to describe her lonliness and loss wonderfully.
good depiction of her relationship with olivia. complicated and sad.
it made me tear up and now i'm so depressed. i want you to write a sequel and make it all better :-)

[tangleofthorns]

Sorry; I can't exactly imagine a sequel will be forthcoming. But I'm very happy that you enjoyed the story!