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This is the Start

Jun 22, 2006 12:17

Title: This is the Start
Author: Megan [__dream_on]
Category: Sushi!fic - short story
Word Count: 1,335
Timeline: In between part one and part two of “The Echoes That Surround You” by ceslas.
Characters: Jayne & Alleyne
Pairings: Mal/Inara and Simon/Kaylee
Rating: G
Warning: Contains superfluff that will reduce your brain to mush. And you will say “Aw!” at least ( Read more... )

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Comments 15

browncoat_2x2 June 22 2006, 20:22:56 UTC

Awwwwww you were right! I did Awwww!!

That was so sweet... I love Ally having a crush on Jayne, and Jayne thinkin' on having a daughter of his own... you just KNOW Jayne would be great with kids, gruff at first, but once they got hold of him, yeah, he'd be wrapped around their fingers just like this...

great stuff!!

xxwont_sayaword June 22 2006, 23:48:16 UTC

Thank you! Praise is especially happy when it comes from you. *cheeky*

browncoat_2x2 June 22 2006, 23:49:16 UTC

aw... go on *is bashful*

tayeatra June 22 2006, 21:12:49 UTC

I want a bed with a goldfish bowl headboard!

If I pout enough do you think I'll get one?... or does that only work for 5 year olds?

This was really cute!

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terimaru June 22 2006, 22:26:38 UTC

:squeals: Look at the fishy!!!

tayeatra June 22 2006, 22:42:18 UTC

Glad you like!

The alternative was...

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xxwont_sayaword June 22 2006, 23:51:38 UTC

Hehe. Yeah, I'm pretty sure Mal will only really make one for his little girl. I can picture Kaylee pouting and asking for one as well. Ha.

And the fishy in the bowl is way more happy than the actual sushi.

terimaru June 22 2006, 22:27:30 UTC

So, so cute and funny. I really enjoyed it, but said all that in the post.

Thanks for the beta. It helped!

terimaru June 22 2006, 22:31:23 UTC

LOL Just realized what your icon says!! :-)

xxwont_sayaword June 22 2006, 23:55:08 UTC

Heehee. I so loved your comments. They made my soul happy. And you're very welcome for the beta. I don't mind editing your stuff. Actually, I get a very sick sense of satisfaction editing other people's stuff. I considered trying to be an editor as a career, but after glancing at some of the books on the market - I realized I'd get very very sick to my stomach if I spend the rest of my life editing a bunch of crap that somehow got published, when I know my stuff is better. LOL. But your stuff is a different story.

Hehe! If I can find some adorable little girl pictures, I totally plan on making some adorable Jayne/Alley pictures. I know Adam has kids, it's just a matter of finding a picture of him with one of them...

paiger1218 June 22 2006, 22:44:04 UTC

this wins the AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW award

xxwont_sayaword June 22 2006, 23:57:26 UTC

...At least it did until Teri put up her Alley & Mal fic. Hehe.

Thank you for this. I really enjoyed writing it. (I'm working on another one because Jayne and Alley are almost my favorite couple to write about)

quillscribe June 22 2006, 22:49:14 UTC

This was adorable! There's something naturally childlike about Jayne anyway in the series, I think, so it's wonderful to see this side of him.

His 'cunning hat' and how he sent home money for Mattie struck me that, however he ended up becoming a mercenary, he didn't start out one.

I love that Alleyne's adoration of him helps to shift his thinking just enough for him to consider a family of his own. After all, Avery is meant to be a home for all of them. Lovely post! :-D

*giggles at Jayne's fear about Mal getting wind of her crush*

xxwont_sayaword June 23 2006, 00:03:36 UTC

Aw! Thank you so much for this! It's like you've seen into the very depths of my soul. Hee. That's exactly how I feel.

Something else I've always wanted to explore is Jayne's fear of River. My theory is that, he's had to harden himself so much to survive as a mercenary that he isn't too sure how to let his feelings out anymore. He pretty much reacts to everything with anger or violence. River sees through him and sees that he isn't as heartless as he pretends to be.

I feel like having Alley around has taught him to express himself and trust people again. Also, because kids are naturally more intuitive than adults are and Alley is likely to see through him just as easily as River does. River just knows to keep her distance.