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FANFIC | Of Hearts Unknown - Chapter 05

Jan 07, 2009 03:28

Title - Of Hearts Unknown - CHAPTER FIVE: Tally Up
Author - Kitoky
Fandom - Chronicles of Narnia: Prince Caspian (Movie Verse)
Characters/Pairings - All; Susan/Caspian
Rating - Chapter rating: M, Overall: M
Status - Not Complete
Summary - It was supposed to be simple. They open the gates, draw the bridge, and infiltrate the castle. It was supposed to be ( Read more... )

rating: m, author: kitoky, fanfiction: of hearts unknown

Comments 8

blackcathollow January 7 2009, 13:48:03 UTC

evil evil evil....

great chapter, write more soon

kitoky January 8 2009, 01:34:18 UTC

No, evil would be killing Peter off. =D

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kitoky January 8 2009, 05:31:28 UTC

Oh, yay!! =D Oh, I don't blame you. So many fics, so little time. I think some people should get paid just sitting around, reading fanfiction.

:p Oh, if you had thought of it, why hadn't you written it? I would've liked to see how yours would've turned out. This little fic idea didn't start out as much but it was like a snowball rolling down a giant hill. It's turned into a much larger project than I thought it would.

Thanks so much for tuning in though. :D Very much appreciate it.

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kitoky January 9 2009, 05:51:34 UTC

Darn life, always getting in the way of fandom. :p Certainly. I'll send you a message. And while I'm at it, I'll just friend you offhandedly just because.

girls_are_weird January 9 2009, 03:04:13 UTC

i had a full review ready for this, and it was a really good one, and then my connection flickered out at the exact moment i clicked the post button >.< damn it, the one time i forget to copy my comment before posting it... *mutters evil curses against lousy connection*

anyway, great chapter. and rest assured that i WILL somehow rewrite that comment and post it here if it's the last thing i do. probably tomorrow at work, though, 'cause now i'm just pissed at this thing... *grumbles*

kitoky January 9 2009, 05:53:22 UTC

Technology is frustrating, but thanks for THIS comment. :p But if you're promising another review comment, hey. I'm all for it. <33

girls_are_weird January 10 2009, 01:43:51 UTC

yep, so here it is (well, the closest thing, it's not exactly what it was yesterday):

“I had it sorted,” Peter remarked... --> LOL, if that isn't the peter we all know and love! well, at least i love him =P i loved that you had grumpy!pete on this, i just adore him when he's grumpy. kinda makes me want to pinch his cheeks xD *glomps pete until he cringes in pain* and i should let you know that i'm studiously ignoring that last line. there's no poison whatsoever in this, at least in my mind. peter is not in any mortal danger at all-- these things usually end up in a much more positive note in my mind, even if they don't on the actual fic. so see, i have nothing to worry about! *big grin* denial is a powerful thing. so i'll just go on blissfully with my everyday routine without ever feeling like i need to break into tears because my pete is dying. neat, huh? xDDDD

other bits and pieces that i loved:

“the horse we have yet to determine a name for is tired...” --> HEH, he's not making the "phillip" mistake twice! ;) i love your edmund ( ... )

kitoky January 10 2009, 04:57:23 UTC

Awesome comment. <3 I seriously love your reviews.

I wanted to put in some sort of "I had it sorted" line because the fact of the matter is, the White Witch-revival attempt does not happen in this story. So I wanted to get that in there somewhere.

Edmund could possibly be the most difficult for me to write. But I --do-- enjoy writing him. And I'm glad that he's turning out okay.

I like dorky awkward, Caspian. I really do. But I have to stop if I want him to properly become a good leader and king. xD

The thing about the poisons... well, you'll see. And there was blood, but Badgers have strong noses, like most rodents who usually bury for a living, so they can smell it.