The only thing I noticed was the use of capitalization in your objective--"Excellent administrative skills" isn't capitalized like your other statements.
Otherwise I think it looks awesome. I'd post mine, but it's just a list of everyone's favorite chain restaurants :P
Oh hey thanks! I hadn't noticed that before. It's probably because that's the piece that I'll change depending on the job I'm applying for. Administrative is just the majority of them.
My favorite chain restaurants? Like Friendly's? ^_^ mm Ice cream....
Well, if you want something more than just restaurant work then it's good to get some help looking it over. There's a lot of valuable skills that you can learn working in a restaurant that can cross over into whatever it is you want to do. ^_^ So don't be ashamed or embarrassed to post it now or anytime, cause I'll totally take a look if you ask me to.
Ok, seriousness. Jac can be of better help here but...
I think you can clean up your objectives. Make them one coherent sentence and lower the buzzwords. (for example, urgency and fast paced are redundant)
Also unless you are applying for a company that might care remove Japanese classes. If you are applying for a 'professional' job (advertising, office work, etc.) I think you could remove Delta Sonic, though I don't mean to disrespect the quality work you did there. I also think you can remove your academic concentrations, I don't list my minor or concentration.
You don't want your best work(as perceived by who you are applying to) drowned out by sidenotes, I guess is my point. Quality over quantity.
I'm not much help since Joe just covered everything i was going to say. Your objective should be one line. Also, it should be tailored to the job that you want... right now it screams "OMG give me a job PURLEEZE!" and that you'll take any job. which may be the case... you'd have to tailor your resume to any job you apply for. This is the line where you say "To further my career in the :blank: field" If you apply for a marketing job, put that in there, if you apply for an administrative job, put that in there instead
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What's the point of reading the objective if it sounds like everyone elses? It's like it's there out of politeness instead of to tell you anything else about the person. I'll work on it tho. It is kinda redundant and does seem a bit desperate, now that it's pointed out to me
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PS: I had no idea what to do with that PA crap in NYC. Honestly it's there for the timeline. I just don't know what the hell they really care more about! The timeline or the experience! They're each different whenever I interview! Resume writing sucks. There are no rules, it's just what gets you noticed. grawr! *frustration abiding* mmm chocolate...
It's screaming: I'm the most important person in the world and, even though thousands of other people have the same skills that I do, it excuses me from thinking all self-important!!
I had tried to make some other posts that were more lengthy and probably a bit more helpful. But, between LJ and firefox, it just wasn't happening.
Also, posting to the public like this is so tacky, when will you ever learn?! :p
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Otherwise I think it looks awesome. I'd post mine, but it's just a list of everyone's favorite chain restaurants :P
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My favorite chain restaurants? Like Friendly's? ^_^ mm Ice cream....
Well, if you want something more than just restaurant work then it's good to get some help looking it over. There's a lot of valuable skills that you can learn working in a restaurant that can cross over into whatever it is you want to do. ^_^ So don't be ashamed or embarrassed to post it now or anytime, cause I'll totally take a look if you ask me to.
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Ok, seriousness. Jac can be of better help here but...
I think you can clean up your objectives. Make them one coherent sentence and lower the buzzwords. (for example, urgency and fast paced are redundant)
Also unless you are applying for a company that might care remove Japanese classes. If you are applying for a 'professional' job (advertising, office work, etc.) I think you could remove Delta Sonic, though I don't mean to disrespect the quality work you did there. I also think you can remove your academic concentrations, I don't list my minor or concentration.
You don't want your best work(as perceived by who you are applying to) drowned out by sidenotes, I guess is my point. Quality over quantity.
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I had tried to make some other posts that were more lengthy and probably a bit more helpful. But, between LJ and firefox, it just wasn't happening.
Also, posting to the public like this is so tacky, when will you ever learn?! :p
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Naw I totally forgot again. oh well.
I'm gonna clean it up a bit. ^_^;;
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