"It is an air quality key management concept recognized by members of the global organization of local governments for sustainability - ICLEI - whose 2009 World Congress will convene in Edmonton this June. It is a key recommendation to any municipality whose concentrations of urban smog are at levels requiring management plans, such as Edmonton."
It's too difficult to read through, and your point that Edmonton has smog levels requiring a management plan will, IMO, be lost on the average reader.
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I think you should dump this:
"It is an air quality key management concept recognized by members of the global organization of local governments for sustainability - ICLEI - whose 2009 World Congress will convene in Edmonton this June. It is a key recommendation to any municipality whose concentrations of urban smog are at levels requiring management plans, such as Edmonton."
It's too difficult to read through, and your point that Edmonton has smog levels requiring a management plan will, IMO, be lost on the average reader.
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