[FIC] Illuminating Heaven - Kakashi/Sasuke

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Title: Illuminating Heaven / 天照 / Amaterasu
Pairing: Kakashi/Sasuke
Rating: NC-17
Warning: Arousal, violence, blood.
A/N: Set in post-canon. Reviews highly appreciated. A huge thank you to my lovely beta editor ka0richan. This fic so would not be what it is now without her!
Summary: Kakashi'd wondered when and if he'd ever encounter his prodigal former

Comments

[kaorismash]

There's really nothing new for me to say that you haven't heard already, I don't think. :\ <- and that's getting redundant as well. Aha. ._.;

I really enjoy watching the way it unfolds. It is also rather amusing seeing your frustration with Sasuke as opposed to Kakashi. ♥

I so love the sensory images you give us, especially all those contrasts between hot and cold, for example: sucking in cold air so fast his lungs burned. Beautiful. *_* There's too many for me to pick out. But oh: The river was a silver gash in a too-white landscape, and when it caught the sun overhead, its waters would scintillate, amplifying the light until it blinded. sdjhgksdg too gorgeous aah. You make it soo easy to imagine these things, everything seems so visual despite being words on a white screen.

Y'know how I was flailing over the one about Kakashi's waistline? Well, it still works when he's sitting down, rest assured, so it is still awesome to me. Very, very shiny. *_

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Seriously, wtf. Writing for Sasuke is like bashing my head against a wall. Repeatedly. And this time was particularly painful.

And and and. That entire last part as Kakashi tackles Sasuke out of the way. ajkhfjkadgjhkdkgsdkjghadjfgh OH I DON'T EVEN NEED TO SAY WHY I LOVE IT SO MUCH. AND, THE END. How delightfully cruel of you.

This was totally more you than me! XDDD Start taking some credit for your own brilliance god dammit! (Okay so, I had the main idea, but you helped flush out the details, so ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥)

Thank you soso much, this took my mind off a lot of things today.

I'm really, really, really happy to hear about that. ;o;/ ♥

[imlikat]

^_____^!!!!

There was no need to worry! This is GREAT!

I love the language you use to describe the fight, especially Sasuke's pov of it, and ESPECIALLY when he goes blind.

And this part!!!

Here in a world plunged in darkness, where vision had been ripped from the root and there was only the roar of sound and the rush of sensation that dove in to compensate for what he suddenly lacked, Sasuke had never felt more powerless or smaller than at any other moment in his life -- save for the one that had defined it.

and i LOOOOOVE how that goes along with this part, another one of my favorite bits:

Maybe if winter lasted longer in Konoha, if the ground froze there too, the people there wouldn't live their lives with eyes closed, unseeing. Maybe they'd be able to understand the world as he did -- how cold it truly was. How large emptiness was.

How it was absence that defined the difference.guh guh guhhhh GOD I love that part @_@ the whole section where he's thinking about being metaphorically blind, i love it

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^__^;; Oh man, I'm still like a;slkfj over it because it was such a struggle to write and how I fought and fought and fought with myself and with that ridiculous Sasuke voice in my head that just did NOT want to cooperate tonight. :|

Ahh, the parts you pointed out are all linked together! Also with the part where he's contemplating blindness earlier. And how he wasn't "meant" to be blind. XD;; Teehee~ I'm glad you liked it! :D

As for their interaction.. XD oh man, Sasuke is such a TARD, I swear. XDD It kills me really. He's in such utter denial it's not even funny.

The "it was-- like--" was part of ka0richan's brilliant beta-ing. So I can't take credit for that! I love it too. :D

And yayyy I'm glad you read it to and THANK YOU SO MUCH!

[acaida]

A cliffhanger!! And one hell of one too. I love how you're updating so quickly. Don't leave us hanging for too long! XD

Great chapter~

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I'll do my best not to. :D Thank you.

[seigetsuko]

This is so awesome! I am loving it all so far - all the references to Kishimoto's storyline make it so much more believable (um... as believable as ninjas with magic powers are... :P) and Sasuke-teme is so intense... and so in denial. Haha :)

Can't wait for the next chapter! :D

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I like to try and keep things as close to canon as possible.

By the way, "Sasuke-teme" is incorrect. "Teme" is just a vulgar way of saying "you." In Naruto-world, the "teme" is translated to "you bastard." Interestingly enough, "kisama" which is also frequently used, is even more vulgar than "teme."

When Naruto says it, it's with a pause. "Sasuke .... Teme!" It's like saying, "Sasuke..... YOU BASTARD!"

But "Sasuke-teme" is very much incorrect and it always irks me like crazy whenever I see it. XDD;; Sorry, pet peeve.

[proud_snapist]

Aiiyyaaa. You write really good fight scenes. I think this is one of the best fight scenes I've read in a very long while. Great chapter! Even throughout thef ast paced fighting, you don't lose the character's thoughts or their personalities. A continuous flow in characterization.

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I struggled a lot with the fight scene, but I'm glad it came out okay!