[FIC] Illuminating Heaven - Kakashi/Sasuke

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Title: Illuminating Heaven / 天照 / Amaterasu
Pairing: Kakashi/Sasuke
Rating: NC-17 (eventual)
Warning: Arousal.
A/N: Set in post-canon. Reviews highly appreciated. A huge thank you to my lovely beta editor ka0richan. This fic so would not be what it is now without her!
Summary: Kakashi'd wondered when and if he'd ever encounter his prodigal former student

Comments

[kaorismash]

Sasuke remembered when snow used to fall light and gentle, like confectionary sugar from the sky. He'd open his mouth wide to capture it before it melted. Snow was always so fleeting in Konoha; it never had any permanence when the ground and the people were so warm. Sometimes if he was lucky, he would manage to capture an errant flake or two and think to himself, this is what the sky tastes like.

THIS PARAGRAPH. I LOVE IT TO PIECES. askjhg "confectionary sugar" is just so ironic, considering the Sasuke of now hates sweet things. This image is just soso delightfully adorable, to the very last words of that line. Good, I love it so much. Aaajdgh. ♥

Your dream sequence is quite impressive with the use of the colors. At first I found the bolded text a bit loud, but then I reread over it and I'm amazed that what I imagine the scenes in my mind, it takes on the filtered color, of either the red, or black and white, and then when you bolded again it flickered. *_* Your skip between italicized to regular and back, it's confusing, but it

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Chibi Sasuke wandering around with his mouth open trying to catch snow is the cutest image I could ever possibly conjure!

I know the dream sequence will probably piss off a lot of people/frustrate them, but I like the way it's formatted. xD It's meant to be confusing and frustrating.

And god, I just, can't stop smiling at the last part. Al those interjections of Kakashi's real thoughts--! It's amazingly hilarious to me

ROFL, well you know I was keyboardmashing at you and laughing my ass off the entire time. I'm STILL laughing at him. XD; God, it's just too funny.

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P.S. THANK YOU ♥

[kaorismash]

OH, THANK YOU. ;Db
(and I apologize if I break your page with this. :3)

It's tooooooo adorable omg chibisuke, it's going to get him kidnapped one day. *_*

I like the way it is too. ♥ *_* ALSO AHAHA. Kakashi, ahsahdjgkadhjgksjdo;kadfh. *dying*

[imlikat]

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^___^ I wanna know what Sasuke's dreaming about!

But seriously, I like this chapter ^^ It feels like a nice little breather after the intensity of the last chapter... even Sasuke's bad dream had some sweetness in it. And then more sweetness, when he woke up, from his pov and from Kakashi's.

he would keep Sasuke by his side and help him realize just where he really belonged.

Even if it meant he had to break him.

*cannot wait to see him break*

And I love Kakashi's canine sense of smell ^^ and the NICE WET SPOT And his roaming thoughts. XD He's so easily distracted! How does he ever manage to get any ninjaing done??? Well, I suppose it's not every day that one is faced with a wet-dream-having Sasuke :D

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XD You'll find out in the next chapter. Except it won't be in graphic detail, unfortunately. (That's for later!)

I think I was telling you the other day that I thought there wasn't enough insight from Kakashi's side as to why he was doing what he was doing and such, so I thought this chapter was necessary in terms of creating closure and stuff.

And yeah, Kakashi is totally @__@;;; at Sasuke-wet-dreaming. He's a little like, "Whoa, wtf?!" because it wasn't something he expected and it just kind of came out of nowhere. xD; He's not as easily distracted in the field! YES FOR WET SPOT.

[imlikat]

XD I GUESS I'LL JUST WAIT THEN :P

I'm digging Kakashi's voice, LOTS ^^ I forgot to say that. Also, YESH for Ruled by Secrecy - I don't know why I left that one off the list on your journal! But the beginning especially was great with the dream-thoughts of snow :)

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XD~! WAITING WILL BE BETTER. I PROMISE. ♥

Ahhh I'm so happy you like it!! Your last comment sounded almost a little ambivalent and just now I was starting to reread the entire chapter to see if I'd slipped up or something??! but then you commented again and I can now stop being paranoid. ♥

And yeah, this song was just so perfect for writing that entire beginning section. (Of course, once things get sort of in the Icha Icha category, it ceases to apply. xD;;)

BTW, for an upcoming chapter, is it possible, with your permission and proper credit, for me to crop a piece of your artwork to accompany the piece? (Obviously I like to do crazy things with formatting and other image-setting devices xD) If you sign on MSN I can tell you about my idea -- or should I email you about it?

[idle_ramblingsx]

Well *dryly* seems like you did just fine for all your worrying yesterday. lol.

What can I say? Another absolutely beautiful chapter full of imagery and metaphors that sear the soul. I especially loved the contrast you made between the gentleness of snow and the harshness of thunder, leading into another contrast of degree/strength about Sasuke's dealings with Kakashi.

And then the scent parallels! SQUEEE! >.< People always use (including me) the "scent of fear" thing, but I've never read it quite like you've done, which seems a lot more realistic (and thus has more impact). But then you used the "scent of arousal" and just killed me with the parallelism

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XD It took me 3 hours to come up with the first line. Once I came up with the line, it took another 3 hours to write the next section, and then another few more to finish the entire thing. xD; Then, there was formatting, beta-ing, etc. Nuts

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The breaking of Sasuke...I dunno how I feel about that....I feel like Sasuke is broken already, and he needs some putting-back-together, instead.

Indeed, Sasuke is very broken and needs some putting back together, but the problem is Sasuke tried to put himself together already and it he put himself together incorrectly. So Kakashi wants to break him apart so he can put him back together. XD

I think Kakashi totally would except if he did, he'd be walking around with a huge boner all day, and the next day is going to be a big day with lots of action ahead. :X

When Sasuke's sleeping/sleepy/disoriented he lets down all his walls and you get to see a little bit of the real Sasuke. I'm really glad that you caught onto that and like him! Sasuke's the most difficult for me to write (it took me like, 3 hours just to think about the opening line for him, and then another 3 hours to write his section VS the 2 that it took me to write all of Kakashi)! You characterize Sasuke so well, so it means a lot to me that you approve. :D

[wickedvirtue]

I just read the interlude before this and this chapter and WOW. You're really good at giving us the gut-check right along with Sasuke. I can't wait to see how Kakashi is going to handle this!

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I hope you read the rest of the story too! Since it, well, all goes together after all. xD Multi-chapter and all~!

I'm guessing you clicked on this because it said "Arousal"? :D Thanks for reading and commenting. ^^