Comments | sub_divided: I am not naturally a writer. No. I'm a reader.

sub_divided

I am not naturally a writer. No. I'm a reader.

Jul 28, 2004 05:13

A consumer not a producer. A copy-cat, maybe. Writing is hard, datte bayo! Especially dark writing. It doesn't take long, yes, but on the other hand it isn't particularly enjoyable.

Below is a Sasuke x Hinata 478 word drabble that was supposed to be evil. And it is, but not in the way I'd originally intended.

( But if, after reading this, you think, 'Hinata didn't deserve that!' then I have accomplished what I set out to do. )

fanfic:multipart, series:naruto

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espeon2000 July 28 2004, 14:43:27 UTC

Eeeee, that's a fun site. English has too many quirks that defy description, but that's what makes it interesting, in my opinion.

sub_divided July 29 2004, 02:46:59 UTC

Site makes me happy ^_^. Although, it is a shame to discriminate against people with slow internet connections (sorry V).

Yum, quirks. And thanks again!

espeon2000 July 29 2004, 04:21:54 UTC

Eh, they'll live. (says the ever-spoiled broadband addict)

You're welcome =)

fickletastictot July 29 2004, 00:11:09 UTC

you. wrote. sasuhina! you're so cool! :DD

oh geez, but Sasuke = angst anyway. it's a fact universally acknowledged, unless one is a blindly romantic fool that believe otherwise. you did his abusive husband character good. *pat pat*

(the story reminds me of another ff.net author with similar-ish writing style. her name is Volpa. the comparison to her is not meant to be mean or anything, just that i think she's rather amazing as you were.)

i'll go skim through that site too because i'd like to see the origins of odd words and phrases to come to attention. and for he record, i think i could be using commas in excess. i just jot it down when it feels more right than having none at all.

You're Alive! You Live! Yay! sub_divided July 29 2004, 01:17:42 UTC

Volpa, huh? *checks* *whistles* Wow, that's hot. I don't think our writing styles match, but I wish I had a story to tell like she does. I had no plan when I wrote this, you see. Probably it was written more in the suzukiblu vein, since that's what I was reading just before. Blame pinkpurruu.

Glad you liked it! Good to see you again! Next time I promise to spend more than an hour or so T_T. Since this is your pairing and all.

Yeah, and aren't those phrase origin things cool? I read William Safire's collumn every month in the New York Times Magazine, too. I think most people use commas in excess before editing. But, it's only because they talk that way! People really do pause before the last item in a list! And that's why the serial comma is a good thing.

Re: You're Alive! You Live! Yay! fickletastictot July 29 2004, 02:59:09 UTC

yay! i'm alive! actually, i just can't get on the computer because my brother keeps on playing these long-winded Starcraft games. if i wait for him to get off, i get really pissed off and i'd be tempted to engage him in a fist fight (whereby i'd cheat and kick him in the shins and he'd tattle like a brat). in the end, i'd stop waiting and just rewatch old tapes or movies, never getting online until the next day. n_n my sad, sad predicament.

oh god, that's Sunfreak! you'd be inspired to write your own oneshot right after you read one of her fanfics. xD; her SasuHina in hyugacest was grim yet... fuzzy? o_O (talented! i should review it one day) ah! there be the connection. but at the same time, your style did remind me of Volpa's in "The Art of Transformation" mostly because of the dark moods of both stories.

dear, take whatever time you'd like for your stories, it is you that should set the pace. so i wouldn't feel so bad about how long i'm taking with my own SasuHina XD i joke and i'm so sorry i'm making you wait for it. it's taking so long ( ... )

Re: You're Alive! You Live! Yay! sub_divided July 29 2004, 05:15:54 UTC

... I should be more like you. I never plan, and seldom spend a lot of time. Ah, but as long as I don't make these (more) public I guess that's ok. Oh yeah, and I didn't know that was Sunfreak *wonders*. I've read a few fics from each end, but really, there's just so many... she's got like a one a day release rate.

I'm still up for reading over that fic, btw (is a natural reader). Anytime.

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sub_divided July 29 2004, 01:39:20 UTC

*cackles madly* Hinata is your favorite character, right? With Neiji? but if I made this a happy fic it'd be one of those "she saves him from his inner darkness" Nicholas Sparks teen-romance-type stories. As much as I like happy endings, I'm not good enough to write one of those. Angst is sooo much easier.

It was the humming that got you? Isn't that more an indication that Hinata, though accepting of abuse, can still maintain some kind of normalcy? Althoguh I guess I took that away too by making it a return to her unhappy childhood. T_T Any parent who marries their child off to that nutcase Sasuke is not a parent, in my opinion.

And XDDD, I was originally going to have Hinata "scrubbing" the floor, but that was too much even for me. Bad Cinderella vibes.

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sub_divided July 29 2004, 02:24:06 UTC

I can only imagine how irritated Sasuke would get watching her hum as she scrubbed.

Yes. Quite.

SASUKE: Arg! Stop being happy! You're supposed to hate me, dammit!
HINATA: O-Okay. But why?
SASUKE: Why? Because I'm evil and I treat you like shit and YOU DON'T DESERVE IT!
HINATA: ...really?

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seppuku_doll October 3 2004, 05:52:32 UTC

XD omfg, how sad. *trembling inside from her sasuke-hate*