Comments | style180: Shinee fanfic: DOGs (Distribution of Gods)

style180

Shinee fanfic: DOGs (Distribution of Gods)

May 11, 2010 18:45

Title: DOGs (Distribution of Gods)
Pairing: broken!Jongsica, Jongkey
Genre: Supernatural & angst
Rating: PG-13 (subject to change)
Summary: Dreams can quickly turn into a reality experienced in two worlds, at the same time.
Disclaimer: the guys belong to SM.
Length: 2/? approx. 1800 words

( “Let me save you,” it goes on, “I want to save you. Do you know what I want to save you from?” )

!fanfic, jongkey, key, shinee, jonghyun

Comments 11

black_stars23 May 11 2010, 23:03:20 UTC

Omo, key?!?!?! This is was nicely written, a change from the typical essay-issh fics. I liked it! Haha

style180 May 12 2010, 01:37:04 UTC

perhaps. and thank you :) glad you like

Ohhh~ geremypark May 12 2010, 00:42:50 UTC

I haven't read the first part of this yet, but I will after I finish writing this comment. xD

Jonghyun hugs her, picking her up and spinning around a few times as she giggles. “First date,” he grins and sets her down. “Where do you wanna go?”

That line was so cute. Uhhhhhhhhhh. I had a lot more to say, but it all went down the drain. . . OH. The way you wrote this was really fun to read. I don't know why, but it just was. Maybe it's 'cause it felt like I was stalking Jjong with all of the exact times and what not. :)
I'm going to go read the first chapter now. This was a great fic.

P.S.
It rapidly transforms back into its original form. Jonghyun’s wide eyes catch a full glimpse of its face - high cheekbones, plump lips, well-defined jaw line, catty eyes, slightly pointed nose. He winces, gritting his teeth as the nails push deeper. Fresh blood begins steadily seeping out, and equally bloody eyes bore holes into his eye sockets, through his brain, and out the back of his skull.That part was scary. I loved it, though. can't wait for ( ... )

Re: Ohhh~ style180 May 12 2010, 01:43:35 UTC

well i tried. i don't want to seem like a jongsica basher, so I guess i tried to write them cute too. :)

thank you, lol. i really like the time things too, cuz i absolutely hate writing transitions most of the time i think i'm lazy

thanks you, i'll try to get it up as soon as i can. :)

Re: Ohhh~ geremypark May 12 2010, 04:52:47 UTC

Haha. I know what you mean. I hate writing transitions too, so I just leave it up to the reader's imaginations. xD
I'd totally steal your idea, but I'd fail miserably at it, and people would be all like, "OMO. She copied that one girl!" o__________o;

Re: Ohhh~ style180 May 12 2010, 18:20:20 UTC

naaaaaa, i hardly doubt that you'll fail. i would be flattered honestly. and speechless :o

jennylynn_15 May 12 2010, 01:36:28 UTC

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okay, the ending was amazing.
i cant tell im going to enjoy this fic so much 8D

style180 May 12 2010, 01:46:03 UTC

key smash :o

happy to know you think so. :) and i hope you do enjoy. plot twists, that it

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style180 May 12 2010, 18:17:25 UTC

in due time, bb. :P

mafuyuchains June 2 2010, 09:03:59 UTC

wow...this is written so well, every detail is so vividly described
it's perfect without elaborate transitions, it makes every word relevant to the story, damn I'm blown away by this, you write horror (at least that's what I would call it) really well.
apart from the style, the story itself is interesting, I'm not sure where you're gonna go with this but that makes it all the more interesting ^^ I'm wondering where the Key in real life is, up till now Jjong has only spoken to the other members. I hope the entity and Key are not entirely the same (maybe just the hurting part of his soul) because it seems hella disturbed and cocky (and I don't like my Key character cocky- but well, everyone to their own).
Well, I'll be waiting for you to continue this~ *sends creative brainwaves your way(not that you don't have enough of them already hahah)*