Week 2 - Write about Indians

[streetnights]

In our dreams, we fight these battles again and again, and make the invaders pay for every drop of blood that they've spilled

Comments

[whipchick]

I like that you told this a little obliquely, so that it's clearly based in a specific culture, but it also reflects the feelings of many colonized/invaded peoples.

[streetnights]

Thank you - I thought your post on not having the right to invent other people's stories hit the nail on the head; I wanted to make sure that (as you said) I didn't create racist or inappropriate work, but I also wanted to take the topic and write something a bit less cliché and a bit more straightforward.

[halfshellvenus]

Beautiful, in both language and feeling.

The restriction of lands is the antithesis of how many Native American tribes lived, so even now... this is nothing like the right solution. I just don't know what that solution is. :(

[streetnights]

The right solution, I think, expired hundreds of years ago. Now, I think, there's only really regret and sadness, and eventually cultures dying out :(

[n3m3sis43]

This is wonderful. I think my favorite part is the universality of it. It's written so it feels like Native Americans, but it could be anyone, really.

[streetnights]

Thanks! That was the goal - originally, I had thought about also adding in sort of a time lapse thing where perhaps the protagonist was looking into the future/into the past, but that felt kind of contrived, so I kept it simple.

[fourzoas]

Great strong voice here and lots of deep, quiet feeling in the face of so much loss. Lovely.

[streetnights]

*bows* Thank you!