Fic prompt filled at Smallfandomfest

[storyfan]

Title: Every Breath You Take
Fandom: Donald Strachey Mysteries
Pairing Donald Strachey/Timothy Callahan
Rating/Category: G/slash
Prompt: Every Breath You Take
Word count: 1261
Disclaimer: These characters belong to Richard Stevenson
Summary: It's an emergency.
Notes/Warnings: This story is written as part of an AU fic in which Tim and Don are in

Comments

[storyfan]

Why, thank you! I've had chest pains before (turned out to be anxiety), so I understand this level of fear.

Considering how well you write, your words are a huge compliment.

[darthanne]

I missed the original story so went back and found it - RL is busy and I'm missing things these days which makes me sad as I love your fic.

This was very bittersweet - love their relationship together but scary at the thought of Don losing Timmy. I'm pleased I went and read the other one so I know they get a long life together following on from this.

The last line is very powerful.

[storyfan]

Darn that real life, interfering in our fic lives!

I don't think I could ever write a story in which one loses the other. Not that every story needs a happy ending, but I couldn't stand see these characters grieve.

I'm glad you liked the last line. I debated about it, thinking it might be too abrupt, but it looks like it worked.

Thank you for your lovely compliments. I appreciate them very much.

[msmaxine]

Wow! Even though I knew from reading the prior story that it would turn out all right, it was still riveting. And the last line...perfect!

[storyfan]

Thanks for the wow! I'm glad you thought it was still riveting even after knowing what would happen.

The last line seems to have worked for everyone. I had thought it was too abrupt an ending, but my beta told me to trust my instincts. I'm glad I did.

Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.

[unavez18]

You would think that knowing things turned out all right would have made this an easier read, but no, the second I figured out where you were going I stopped scrolling because I got so nervous (*rolling eyes at self*). Had to take a deep breath before I could go on . . . you did a beautiful job, though. Was it hard to write?

[storyfan]

What lovely compliments! I'm so glad you liked this one.

It was hard to write, primarily because my grandfather (the greatest man who ever lived) died of a heart attack. His death was immediate, so he didn't have to go through the terror and pain, but it left my wonderful grandmother on her own.

Grandpa was our family's rock, and that foundation has never been replaced. Since my grandmother's death three years later, my small family is rather fractured and uncommunicative. You could say grandpa's heart attack broke the thread that bound our family.

Thank you for asking the question, and I hope I didn't tell you more than you really wanted to know.

[unavez18]

Nah, that's what I was getting at. My FIL had children quite late in life, so he's getting up there in age . . . we've had two close calls with heart attacks already, including one two weeks before my wedding . . . Reading about heart attacks can be tough, which is why I thought it might be difficult to write as well.

[iyra92]

O...I love it....so much angst...Thanks for sharing this wonderful story. :-)

[storyfan]

Angst is great if the story ends on a somewhat happy note, at least. I couldn't bear to have these two unhappy forever.

And thank you for reading and taking the time to comment! Your kind words are much appreciated.

[iyra92]

Yes, I agree 100%. I hate story with sad ending! or story going nowhere. In writing perspective- the whole scene discribed and dialogued really well (that what I like about it).

[storyfan]

Thank you! You're so kind.