Unbalance (Part 2)

[stormy_words]

Title: Unbalance
Author:saturn_necklace/stormy_words
Pairing/group: Ohno/Nino, Arashi
Word count: 16,000
Rating: PG-13
Genre: AU (Historical/fantasy)
Warnings: British English.
Summary: Nino, Ohno, Sho, Aiba and Jun live in a small town in the mountains. They live normal lives until suddenly everything they've ever known changes.
AN: Originally posted here at je_holiday for lady_gemma. Now that

Comments

[luna_sea8]

This was such as nice story. I really liked the setting and the ohmyia parts of course. I only wish the story could've been more detailed I would have read it all in one sitting. (^_^)

[saturn_necklace]

I'm glad you liked it :)

I'm curious to know where you thought it lacked detail; was it in the plot or the descriptions?

Thanks for reading :D

[luna_sea8]

I wished the whole story was more detailed, like had several chapters where everything was detailed. *including the ohmiya moments (^_^)* I think it would have had access for more doors opened for more drama between Ohno and Nino and put more reading on their abilities.

[saturn_necklace]

Ah I see. This might well have ended up chaptered actually, if it hadn't been written for je_holiday, but since it was, I didn't really have enough time for a chaptered fic and it would've been too much.

[maiisaki]

I couldn't stop reading, and I don't think I will, after all this is really worth for re-reading :) Thanks!

[saturn_necklace]

I'm glad you liked it!! :D

Thank you for reading and commenting ♥

[deeya_ohmiya]

I love the story (^_^)..
Ohmiya parts are the best (^_^)..
Thanks zoo much for sharing (^_^)...

[saturn_necklace]

I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Thanks for reading and commenting :D!

[happiegurlie]

That was amazing. I usually have to will myself to read long fics, but this one was such a fast read. The very first scene -- the four running -- was really well written. I really like your style and hope you keep writing! The sheer creativity of this story baffled me. For someone like me, who has roughly zero percent creative genes, it's so fun to be able to read something that was CREATED by someone else. It's amazing.

Definitely going in my memories. :D

[saturn_necklace]

I'm glad you liked it! ♥

I was worried that the length would put people off reading, so I'm happy to know that it wasn't hard to make it the whole way through in one session :). I think the first scene was probably my favourite part, so I'm glad I'm not the only one who feels that way XD;

XD I have to say, I'm not always so creative; a lot of the time I have trouble thinking of plots, but once have them they're very persistent XD;

I'm happy that you thought it was good enough to put in your memories!

Thanks for reading and for your great comment ♥

[kattrin_kun]

This was a really great story! I would have only hoped for a little bit more in their abilities and maybe even a battle or two but it was still wonderful! I loved the Ohmiya bit and I really like stories like this, I just love the whole Arashi with abilities in old-ish times :)

[saturn_necklace]

I'm glad you enjoyed it :D!

I'd been thinking that there wasn't very much on their abilities, but it never really seemed to find a way into the fic; the same sort of thing applied with battle scenes - I had originally intended to have one, or something of that sort, in there (other than the first section, that is) but when I aws part way through I realised that with the plot, a battle wouldn't be plausible in the end.

That said, I was thinking about maybe writing more, like a prologue etc. for the fic, and I posted a poll over here. So if you thought that would be a good way to go into some of the unexplored parts of the fic, feel free to vote :)

Thank you for commenting ♥